Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Focus on accuracy, clarity and coherence. Use correct vocabulary (park, grass), correct grammar (past tense: liked), and a clear topic sentence followed by one or two concise supporting details. Keep answers natural and avoid invented or confusing phrases like “time spending in boxes” or “lush green glasses.”

Exemplo: I liked going to parks as a child. The parks had wide green lawns and playgrounds where I played with friends, which made me feel relaxed and happy after a long week at school.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use simple clear phrases. Use present tense for current habits (I still like going to parks). Avoid unclear words and correct collocations (leisure time, green grass, birds sing). Limit to maximum five sentences and link ideas with connectors like “because” or “so”.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks in my free time because they are peaceful and full of birdsong. I often sit on the grass or walk on the paths to relax and clear my mind.

Sugestão: Make your opinion clear and support it with specific reasons. Use concise sentences and correct word order: e.g., “I would like more parks because they provide recreation, improve people’s health, and create spaces for families.” Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) to connect points logically.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe places for exercise and relaxation. For example, parks encourage families to spend time together and help reduce stress for city residents.

Sugestão: Be specific: name the park (or describe it) and give concise reasons why you want to visit. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and incorrect nouns (money park?). Use future tense correctly: “I want to visit X park because it has…” and provide one or two clear supporting details.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in the future because I have heard it is very large and has many attractions like lakes and walking trails. I would enjoy spending a day there sightseeing and relaxing.

× Yes, I like the pork as a child because pork are the source of recreational refreshments and time spending in boxes.

✓ Yes, I liked parks as a child because parks were a source of recreational activities and ways to spend time.

The student used singular/plural incorrectly: 'pork' likely intended 'parks' and 'pork are' mixes form. Also 'time spending in boxes' is awkward; changed to 'ways to spend time.' Past reference to childhood requires past tense 'liked' and 'were.' Use plural 'parks' and 'were' to match plurality. Suggestion: Identify the intended noun (park/parks). Ensure subject and verb plural/singular match (parks + were). Use natural collocations like 'recreational activities' and 'ways to spend time'.

× Have lush green glasses where you feel fresh and very happy and it relaxes you from your work.

✓ They have lush green grass where you feel fresh and happy, and being there relaxes you from work.

Several word choices are incorrect: 'glasses' should be 'grass.' 'Have' lacks a clear subject; replaced with 'They have' referring to parks. 'It relaxes you from your work' is unnatural; use 'being there relaxes you from work.' Also simplified redundant modifiers. Suggestion: Use correct nouns (grass), include subject, and prefer natural expressions like 'being there relaxes you'.

× You became very happy after.

✓ You become very happy afterwards.

Original uses past simple 'became' but context describes a general experience of parks; present simple 'become' or 'you feel very happy afterwards' is more appropriate. Also 'after' should be 'afterwards' or 'after that.' Suggestion: Match tense to context (general truth = present simple) and use adverb forms correctly.

× Yes, I still like to go into going to park when I have layer time and thanks to the power of sheets and spend, sometimes you are the building.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to the park when I have free time and relax; sometimes I go with others who are nearby.

This sentence contains many incorrect words and tense issues. 'Layer time' likely 'free time.' 'Go into going to park' should be 'go to the park.' 'Thanks to the power of sheets and spend' is unclear; simplified to 'relax.' 'Sometimes you are the building' is meaningless; replaced with 'sometimes I go with others who are nearby.' Use present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary ('free time','go to the park'), keep present simple for habits, and avoid literal translations that produce nonsense phrases.

× The park is very cold, all the birds are cheap and all the other feel very awesome and all the green and mush grass around me, so I spend more time there.

✓ The park is very peaceful; the birds are cheerful, and everything feels wonderful with green, soft grass around me, so I spend more time there.

Many word choices are wrong: 'cold' likely meant 'calm' or 'peaceful'; 'birds are cheap' should be 'birds are cheerful' or 'chirping'; 'mush grass' should be 'soft grass.' Reworded for natural description and coherence. Kept present simple for general statement. Suggestion: Choose adjectives that fit context ('peaceful','cheerful','soft'), and structure sentences to list descriptions clearly.

× Yes, I would like to have more parks in my city because parks are the source of entertainment for people.

✓ Yes, I would like to have more parks in my city because parks are a source of entertainment for people.

Minor article issue: 'the source' implies a single source; better to say 'a source' because parks are one of several entertainment sources. Plural 'parks' and verb agreement are fine. Suggestion: Use 'a source' when referring to one of many options rather than 'the source.'

× So there are more entertainment, more people are relaxing, get relaxation from the work and more time, more they have time to spend together with their families, with their friends and with their relatives.

✓ With more parks, there would be more entertainment; more people could relax and get relief from work, and they would have more time to spend with their families, friends, and relatives.

Original sentence is run-on and ungrammatical. Rearranged into clearer clauses and corrected verb forms ('could relax', 'get relief'). Ensured parallel structure and natural connectors. Used conditional 'would' to show result of having more parks. Suggestion: Break long ideas into clauses, use modal verbs appropriately to indicate possibility, and maintain parallelism in lists.

× So I think there are more parks requiring our city.

✓ So I think our city needs more parks.

Awkward phrasing 'parks requiring our city' is incorrect. Use active structure 'our city needs more parks.' Keeps meaning clear and concise. Suggestion: Use direct subject-verb-object order and choose correct verbs (need) to express necessity.

× Yes, I want to visit a money park in the future because I have heard a lot of things about that for this work is very huge and uh, there are more source of entertainment in the park for the people.

✓ Yes, I want to visit an amusement park in the future because I have heard a lot about it; it is very large and offers many sources of entertainment for people.

'Money park' is incorrect; likely 'amusement park.' Article 'a' before vowel sound 'amusement' should be 'an.' 'There are more source' should be 'it offers many sources' or 'there are more sources.' Corrected pluralization and article use. Suggestion: Use correct noun ('amusement park'), choose appropriate article ('an'), and ensure subject-verb and noun plurality match ('many sources').

× So it is my wish that, uh, I will uh, visit the park in the future and spend their time and spend more my time there.

✓ So I wish to visit the park in the future and spend my time there.

Redundant fillers and incorrect pronoun 'their time' instead of 'my time.' Simplified to natural future intention 'I wish to visit' or 'I would like to visit.' Avoid using both 'wish' and 'will' together; use one. Maintained future plan meaning. Suggestion: Use clear future expressions like 'I would like to visit' or 'I plan to visit,' and ensure pronouns agree with the subject.

× So I will be happy after that.

✓ I will be happy after that.

Original had extraneous 'So' which is acceptable but unnecessary; corrected sentence keeps future tense. Also fine as is; minor stylistic change. Suggestion: Keep concise sentences; use 'I will be happy afterwards' for smoother phrasing.