Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Correct grammar and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and article errors (e.g., “I liked going to parks,” “a bouncing castle,” “it was located”). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I liked going to parks as a child. For example, there was a park near my house with huge swings, slides and a bouncing castle, and it was next to a lake with a beautiful view. I spent most afternoons there with my friends, which made those days very memorable.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and be more specific. Give a concise topic sentence, then one supporting reason and an example. Use linking words to connect ideas and vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘playgrounds’ or ‘park equipment’ instead of repeating ‘swings’ and ‘parks’).

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I especially like the swings because swinging makes me feel carefree, and sometimes I go to a nearby park after work to relax and clear my mind.

Sugestão: Make the answer grammatically correct and organize it: state preference then give specific reasons. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’, and avoid filler phrases (e.g., ‘or something like that’).

Exemplo: I would prefer more high-quality parks rather than just more parks. For example, parks with abundant trees, well-maintained playground equipment and a lake or pond would encourage families to spend time outdoors and improve local wellbeing.

Sugestão: Remove hesitations and correct names and articles. Give a clear topic sentence listing a couple of specific parks, then add a brief reason why you want to visit. Keep it concise and use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘because’.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit several national parks in the future. For example, I hope to see Yellowstone because of its geysers and wildlife, and Jim Corbett because I want to see tigers and experience the rainforest.

× Yes, of course I did like to going to the parks as a child.

✓ Yes, of course I did like going to the parks as a child.

The verb pattern 'did like' should be followed by the base form or a gerund depending on meaning. 'Like to going' mixes 'to' (infinitive marker) with the gerund 'going', which is incorrect. Use either 'did like to go' or 'did like going'. Here 'did like going' keeps the intended meaning and natural phrasing.

× In fact I love them.

✓ In fact, I loved them.

The question asks about childhood preferences (past). The student began with 'did like... as a child', so the following sentence should be in past tense to be consistent. 'I love them' is present tense; change to 'I loved them' to match the past timeframe. Also add a comma after 'In fact' for clarity.

× I would go to a park near my house which had huge swings, slides, seesaws and also a bouncing house.

✓ I would go to a park near my house that had huge swings, slides, seesaws, and a bouncing house.

The relative clause should use 'that' (or 'which' with a comma) for a defining clause. Also include commas in the list. This improves clarity and corrects the restrictive relative clause usage.

× It was located near a lake which had a beautiful view.

✓ It was located near a lake that had a beautiful view.

For a defining relative clause, use 'that' rather than 'which' without a comma. This makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I do still like going to the parks.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks.

Use simple present 'I still like' (omit auxiliary 'do' unless for emphasis). Also omit the article 'the' before 'parks' when speaking generally about parks. This makes the sentence natural in present tense.

× I actually love the swings and the parks and I always swing on the swings and feel like a child trying to reach the sky.

✓ I actually love swings and parks, and I always swing on the swings and feel like a child trying to reach the sky.

When speaking generally, omit 'the' before plural nouns like 'swings' and 'parks'. Keep 'the swings' later when referring to specific swings being used. Also add a comma before the conjunction for readability.

× I would like to see good quality parks more than the number of parks, huge parks which have more green tree and good things to play with and also if you it could be with nearby a lake or something like that.

✓ I would like to have better-quality parks rather than more parks: large parks that have more green trees and good play equipment, and, if possible, are near a lake or something similar.

Multiple issues: use of 'good quality parks' better as 'better-quality parks'; 'more than the number of parks' is awkward—use 'rather than more parks'; 'huge parks which have more green tree' needs plural 'trees' and a defining clause 'that have'; 'good things to play with' is informal—use 'play equipment'; 'if you it could be with nearby a lake' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'if possible, are near a lake'. This correction addresses article use, plurality, relative clauses, and overall sentence structure.

× Fox I'm not sure but there are few national parks like the Yellowstone Park, Jim Corbett National Park.

✓ Well, I'm not sure, but there are a few national parks like Yellowstone Park and Jim Corbett National Park.

'Fox' appears to be a typo; change to 'Well'. Use 'a few' not 'few' to indicate some exist. Do not use 'the' before 'Yellowstone Park' in this list; include 'and' between park names. Add commas for clarity.

× I would love to visit them one day.

✓ I would love to visit them one day.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical change needed; it fits the future-in-the-past desire and uses appropriate modal 'would'.

× But yes, of course I would love to go to the parks in the future.

✓ But yes, of course I would love to go to parks in the future.

When speaking generally about parks, omit 'the' before 'parks'. The modal 'would love to' is appropriate for future desire. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.