Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct mistakes (e.g. 'amusement parks', 'on weekends', 'after school and on weekends') and avoid repetitive phrases. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My mother and I often went to amusement parks after school and on weekends, which kept me energetic and happy. I especially enjoyed the rides and the time spent with her, so it became our favorite shared activity.

Sugestão: Answer directly and politely, avoid absolute language like 'definitely no' which can sound blunt. Provide a brief reason and one example using linking words (e.g. 'however', 'therefore'). Fix grammar ('museums', 'because parks seem boring to me'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I don't visit parks as often these days because I feel they are more suited to younger children. Instead, I usually go to cinemas or museums when I want to relax, as these places offer activities that interest me more.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific reasons and one concrete example. Correct phrasing (e.g. 'I would like more parks to be built', 'there aren't enough recreational facilities'). Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'. Keep it to 3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks to be built in my city because there are few recreational facilities available. For example, parents with young children often have nowhere nearby to take them to play, so parks would improve family leisure options. Therefore, new parks would make the city more pleasant and active.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer naming the park or city, correct vocabulary and grammar ('breathtaking', 'I want to', 'I want to visit a park in Dubai'). Add one specific reason and who you'd go with. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit parks in Dubai, especially because the city has many stunning, well-designed parks with breathtaking scenery. I want to explore them with my parents or close friends because they offer great photo spots and relaxing spaces.

× Definitely yes.

✓ Definitely, yes.

The original fragment lacks a necessary pause or connective; adding a comma makes the response a complete interjection and improves clarity. Suggestion: use a comma after introductory interjections (e.g., 'Definitely, yes' or 'Yes, definitely').

× We used to go amusement parks with my mom after school were weekends because this activity helped me to stay energetic and lively.

✓ We used to go to amusement parks with my mom after school or on weekends because this activity helped me stay energetic and lively.

Errors: missing preposition 'to' before 'amusement parks', incorrect conjunction 'were' instead of 'or', and unnecessary 'to' before 'stay'. These are sentence structure and preposition errors. Suggestions: include 'to' after 'go', use 'or on weekends' for time expression, and use the base verb after 'helped me' ('helped me stay').

× So I would say it was our common hobby with my lovely mom.

✓ So I would say it was a shared hobby of mine and my lovely mom.

Using 'common hobby with' is awkward; better to use 'a shared hobby of mine and my mom' or 'a common hobby between me and my mom'. This fixes preposition and phrasing issues. Suggestion: use 'shared hobby' or 'common hobby between'.

× Definitely no, because from my perspective, parks are for kids and children.

✓ Definitely not, because, in my perspective, parks are for children.

'Definitely no' is unnatural as a direct answer to 'Do you still like...' Use 'Definitely not'. Also 'kids and children' is repetitive; choose 'children'. Suggestion: use 'Definitely not' and concise noun choice.

× I'm 21 right now.

✓ I am 21 right now.

Contraction is acceptable in speech but written guidance prefers full form 'I am'. Tense is present and correct; change is stylistic. Suggestion: use 'I am' in formal responses.

× That's why I prefer going to other facilities such as cinema, shopping malls or museum because parks are boring for me these days.

✓ That's why I prefer going to other places such as the cinema, shopping malls, or museums, because parks are boring to me these days.

Errors: 'facilities' is odd here; 'places' is better. Articles missing before 'cinema' and 'museum' and pluralization of 'museum' needed. Also 'boring for me' is less natural than 'boring to me'. Suggestion: use 'the cinema' and plural 'museums', and replace 'for' with 'to'.

× Yeah.

✓ Yes.

'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is more appropriate in a test. Suggestion: use more formal affirmatives in exam responses.

× Actually, yeah, I would like to parks to be constructed because in my city there aren't enough facilities and amenities.

✓ Actually, yes, I would like parks to be constructed because in my city there aren't enough facilities and amenities.

Errors: unnecessary 'to' after 'like' and awkward 'be constructed' is passive but acceptable. Removed 'to' and changed 'yeah' to 'yes'. Suggestion: say 'I would like parks to be built' or 'I would like more parks to be constructed'.

× Sometimes citizens, especially parents with kids, feel bored.

✓ Sometimes citizens, especially parents with children, feel bored.

'Kids' is informal; in formal responses use 'children'. Pronoun use is okay but word choice improved. Suggestion: use 'children' in formal contexts.

× In such cases, there should be some places like parks in order to entertain.

✓ In such cases, there should be places like parks to provide entertainment.

'Some places like parks' is wordy and 'in order to entertain' lacks an object. Rephrase to 'places like parks to provide entertainment' to complete the idea. Suggestion: specify purpose with a noun ('entertainment').

× Of course, yeah.

✓ Of course, yes.

Use 'yes' instead of informal 'yeah' in a formal test setting. Suggestion: prefer formal affirmatives.

× These days I'm really dreaming about going to park in Dubai because the brace taking scenery really attracts me and I wanna explore that location with my parents or with my close friends because it's one of the most popular.

✓ These days I'm really dreaming about going to a park in Dubai because the breathtaking scenery really attracts me, and I want to explore that place with my parents or my close friends because it's one of the most popular.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'park', 'brace taking' is misspelled and should be 'breathtaking', 'wanna' is informal—use 'want to', 'location' is odd; 'place' works better, and ending 'one of the most popular' is incomplete—one of the most popular what? Clarify 'parks'. Suggestions: add articles, correct spelling, avoid slang, and complete comparisons (e.g., 'one of the most popular parks in the world').