Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn't enjoy parks much as a child.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid fragments and incorrect word forms (e.g. “go to the river,” “find mushrooms,” “my father”).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child. Instead, I preferred visiting the river near my home or going into the forest with my father to find mushrooms, because those places felt more peaceful and exciting.

Sugestão: Make your answer more coherent and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I still enjoy going to parks.”), then give specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “and.” Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases; say clearly whether parks are free, well maintained, or have wildlife and give one brief example.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because many of them are well maintained and free to enter. For example, I like visiting the local park to watch birds and see small animals, which helps me relax.

Sugestão: Clarify your idea and use precise vocabulary. Start with a direct answer, then explain why with specific details and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “they give me a pressure.” Say instead how more parks would benefit people (e.g. more choices, less crowding, better health).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more parks would give people better choices and reduce crowding. For instance, if there were more neighborhood parks, families could find quiet places to walk or exercise without traveling far.

Sugestão: Make the response more fluent and eliminate repetition. Start with a clear statement, then provide one or two specific reasons or details about the park (e.g. scenery, wildlife, geysers) using linking words like “because” or “for example.”

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park in the United States because I have heard about its spectacular geysers and diverse wildlife. For example, I’m especially keen to see Old Faithful and the bison that roam the plains.

× No, I didn't because I live in the suburb but I like go to the. River or go with my daddy to found mushroom in the forest.

✓ No, I didn't because I lived in the suburbs, but I liked going to the river or going with my dad to find mushrooms in the forest.

Multiple sentence structure and grammar issues: wrong present tense 'live' should be past 'lived' to match 'didn't'; singular/plural: 'the suburb' -> 'the suburbs'; verb form: 'like go' should be 'liked going' (verb + -ing after 'like' in past context); misplaced article/punctuation before 'River' and capitalization; 'daddy' more natural as 'dad'; 'to found mushroom' incorrect infinitive and noun number -> 'to find mushrooms'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense, use -ing after 'like' when describing habitual activities, pluralize countable nouns, and correct word order for infinitive verbs.

× I do because there are many parks, uh, conserved, uh, cancel the ticket. It's uh, all. Most of them are free to, in into. So I like to, and I like to see the animals inside.

✓ I do because there are many parks that are preserved and don't charge an entrance fee. Most of them are free, so I like to go and see the animals inside.

Problems: awkward phrases and incorrect verb forms. 'Conserved' is passable but 'preserved' or 'maintained' is more natural; 'cancel the ticket' is incorrect for 'no admission fee' -> 'don't charge an entrance fee'; 'It's uh, all. Most of them are free to, in into.' is fragmented and incorrect prepositions. Use simple present for current facts: 'there are', 'don't charge', 'are free', 'I like to go'. Suggestion: use clear vocabulary for fees, avoid fragments, and maintain consistent present tense for general truths.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Until now, many kind of different kind of parks in my city. I can choose which one I I will go umm, they give me a pressure, no.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. So far, there are many different kinds of parks in my city. I can choose which one I will go to, and they don't put pressure on me.

Errors: 'Until now' awkward for present state -> 'So far'; 'many kind of different kind of parks' incorrect word order and number -> 'many different kinds of parks'; missing preposition 'to' after 'go'; 'they give me a pressure' incorrect article and phrasing -> 'they don't put pressure on me' or 'they don't make me feel pressured'. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('different kinds of'), include necessary prepositions, and use natural idioms for 'pressure'.

× Yes, I want to go to Yellowstone's Nation National Park. This park is in America. I hope I can visit the park one day. I I heard about I heard about this park. It's very interesting.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Yellowstone National Park. This park is in the United States. I hope I can visit the park one day. I have heard about this park; it sounds very interesting.

Issues: incorrect name 'Yellowstone's Nation National Park' -> 'Yellowstone National Park'; 'America' is better expressed as 'the United States' in formal speech; tense and repetition: 'I I heard about I heard about' redundant and 'heard' alone is simple past but to express experience up to now use present perfect 'I have heard'; 'It's very interesting' can be 'it sounds very interesting' when talking about reputation. Suggestion: use correct place names, avoid repetition, and choose appropriate tense (present perfect) when referring to experiences or things heard about.