Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise, use correct tense and sentence structure, and add a clear topic sentence followed by specific details. Avoid repeating simple phrases ('I like') and correct grammar (e.g., 'when I was a child', 'my parents took me to the park'). Use one or two linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. I loved going to parks when I was a child because they had swings, seesaws and slides that I enjoyed. My parents often took me there on weekends, and I remember playing there for hours with my friends.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give a reason using correct grammar. Instead of 'Not yet', say 'Not really' or 'Not as much'. Give a specific explanation and, if possible, add a brief contrast to childhood habits using a linking word.

Exemplo: Not really. I’m 19 now, so I don’t visit parks as often as I did as a child because I am busy with college and part-time work. However, I do go sometimes for exercise or to meet friends.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion about whether you would like more parks. Use correct grammar ('My city has three or four parks') and give specific reasons why more parks would be beneficial (e.g., recreation, health, community). Avoid vague or contradictory sentences like 'it's not a experience. Good.' Use linking words to explain reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. My city only has three or four parks, so having more would give people more space for exercise and family outings. For example, new parks could reduce overcrowding and encourage healthier lifestyles.

Sugestão: Provide a clear statement about which park and why you want to go, using correct verb forms and natural phrasing. Use linking words to describe time and purpose (e.g., 'in the future', 'for jogging'). Be specific about the benefits you expect to get from going there.

Exemplo: Yes. In the future I plan to visit the city’s new riverside park early in the morning for jogging because it looks peaceful and has good running paths. I think exercising there every day would help me feel relaxed and stay fit.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child because I like park most and I like swings and I like seesaw and I like slide.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I liked the park the most and I liked the swings, the seesaw, and the slide.

The student used present tense 'like' but the question refers to childhood, so past tense should be used (present tense issue). Also plural and article errors: 'park' should be 'parks' or 'the park' and items should use articles and commas for clarity. Use past tense 'liked' consistently and add 'the' before specific nouns and pluralize where appropriate. Suggestions: change 'like' to 'liked', use 'the park' or 'parks', add articles 'the' before specific play equipment, and separate list items with commas.

× So I go to my parents as my childhood and my parents, uh, take me a park and I enjoy a lot.

✓ So when I was a child my parents took me to a park and I enjoyed it a lot.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and tense forms (sentence structure errors). 'Go to my parents as my childhood' is ungrammatical; the correct idea is 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'took' and the correct preposition 'to a park'. Replace vague 'enjoy a lot' with 'enjoyed it a lot'. Suggestions: use 'when I was a child', use past tense verbs for past events, use 'to' with 'take' and refer to enjoyment with an object ('enjoyed it').

× Not yet. I am not a child. I am now a 19 years old, so I cannot go as very much.

✓ Not anymore. I am not a child. I am 19 years old now, so I cannot go very often.

Tense and time-expression issues: 'Not yet' is inappropriate; 'Not anymore' fits. 'I am now a 19 years old' mixes article and age expression: use 'I am 19 years old' or 'I am now 19'. 'So I cannot go as very much' is ungrammatical; use 'very often' to indicate frequency. Suggestions: use correct age phrasing without 'a' before the age number, replace 'as very much' with 'very often'.

× Yes, my city have three to four parks and I visited a lot of time with my parents and with my nephews and so it's not a experience. Good.

✓ Yes, my city has three or four parks and I visited them many times with my parents and my nephews, so it was a good experience.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my city have' should be 'my city has'. 'Three to four' is better expressed as 'three or four'. 'Visited a lot of time' is ungrammatical; use 'visited them many times'. 'It's not a experience. Good.' should be 'it was a good experience' for past reference and correct article use ('a' before a noun) and adjective order. Suggestions: ensure verb agrees with singular subject, use 'many times' for frequency, use correct articles and past tense for past experiences.

× Yes, one park is here I go in future and I go early morning with my jogging exercise and I feel very, very freely.

✓ Yes, there is one park here that I will go to in the future; I will go early in the morning to jog and I will feel very free.

The original lacks 'there is' to introduce existence and mixes tenses and structures (there be issue). Use 'there is one park here' and a relative clause 'that I will go to in the future'. 'I go early morning with my jogging exercise' should be 'I will go early in the morning to jog'. 'Feel very, very freely' is incorrect: 'free' is an adjective describing a feeling; 'freely' is an adverb. Use 'feel very free'. Suggestions: use 'there is' to introduce existence, use future tense 'will' for planned future actions, use 'to jog' for purpose, and use 'feel free' rather than 'feel freely'.

× And so I go everyday park and I take exercise.

✓ So I will go to the park every day and exercise.

Tense inconsistency: the student speaks about future plans but uses present simple 'go' and 'take exercise'. For future intention use 'will' or 'am going to'. Also fix adverb placement and article: 'everyday park' should be 'the park every day' and 'take exercise' is more naturally 'exercise'. Suggestions: use 'will' or 'am going to' for future plans, place adverbs like 'every day' after the verb or before the verb phrase, and use 'exercise' as the verb.