Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Pronunciation and grammar need correction and sentences should be more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., 'used to go'), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific supporting detail (e.g., a favorite activity or memory) and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go with my cousin to ride bikes and play badminton, and my favorite memory is racing him along the gravel path. Because the park was close to home, we went there almost every weekend.

Sugestão: Improve grammar, cohesion and conciseness. Start with a clear statement about current habits, then use linking words (however, instead, but) to contrast past and present. Replace awkward phrases ('the times have change') and avoid repetition. Give one specific frequency or example to be more precise.

Exemplo: I don't go to parks as often as before. Instead, I usually exercise at the gym and lift weights three times a week; however, I still meet friends occasionally to play football in a park on weekends.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and word choice, remove repetition, and provide more specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, moreover) to organize points. Give a clear topic sentence, then two concise supporting reasons with a brief example or result.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would increase green space and improve air quality, which is pleasant to look at and relaxing. Moreover, they would encourage physical activity—for example, people could walk, cycle, or exercise outdoors, helping to reduce obesity rates.

Sugestão: Clarify and tighten the response. Start with a direct topic sentence, then list desired features using linking words (for example, and) and avoid vague phrasing like 'that would be the part.' Be specific about why those features matter.

Exemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind, but I would like a park with a large open space for running and a proper badminton court, plus outdoor exercise equipment. These features would let me train, play sports with friends and warm up safely.

× I used to went there with my cousin time to time to ride a bike or play badminton in the park.

✓ I used to go there with my cousin from time to time to ride a bike or play badminton in the park.

The phrase 'used to' requires the base form of the verb, not the past form. 'Went' is the past simple of 'go'; after 'used to' you must use 'go'. Also add 'from' before 'time to time' for the correct idiom: 'from time to time'. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb and common time expressions like 'from time to time'.

× Now the times have change.

✓ Now the times have changed.

This sentence uses present perfect ('have') so the main verb must be in past participle form. 'Change' is base form; the correct past participle is 'changed'. Use 'have changed' to describe a change that has occurred up to now.

× I don't usually go to parks anymore. Instead I go to the gym to exercise, lift weights instead of going to the park to run or play badminton.

✓ I don't usually go to parks anymore. Instead I go to the gym to exercise and lift weights, rather than going to the park to run or play badminton.

This sentence needed a linking conjunction for parallel actions: 'exercise and lift weights' keeps verbs parallel. 'Instead of' should compare activities; using 'rather than' is clearer when contrasting 'going to the gym' with 'going to the park'. Ensure parallel structure when listing verbs.

× But sometimes I do meet up with my friends and play some football.

✓ But sometimes I meet up with my friends and play football.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for simple present habitual actions unless used for emphasis. 'Play some football' is acceptable, but 'play football' is more natural in this context. Suggest using simple present for habitual actions without 'do' unless emphasizing.

× Having more parks mean having a lot greenery and it would be nice for the eyes.

✓ Having more parks means having a lot of greenery, and it would be pleasant for the eyes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Having more parks' is singular gerund phrase, so use 'means' not 'mean' (also relates to ID 27 but within listed types choose quantifier here). Also 'a lot greenery' is missing 'of' after 'lot' and 'nice for the eyes' is awkward; 'pleasant for the eyes' is more natural. Suggest: 'means having a lot of greenery' and use 'pleasant' or 'nice to look at'.

× It would also helps reduce obesity which is a large concern concern.

✓ It would also help reduce obesity, which is a major concern.

After 'would' the base form of the verb is required, so use 'help' not 'helps'. Also remove the duplicate 'concern' and prefer 'major concern' rather than 'large concern'. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is a major concern'.

× There's no specific park that I want to visit, but a park should have a large space for running and also a badminton court or a place you can exercise.

✓ There isn't any specific park that I want to visit, but a park should have a large space for running and also a badminton court or a place where you can exercise.

'There's' is colloquial and acceptable, but in formal usage 'There isn't any specific park' is clearer. More importantly, the relative clause needs 'where' to indicate location: 'a place where you can exercise.' Suggest using 'where' after 'place' for correct syntax.