Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar (articles, tense, subject-verb agreement), avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect sentence parts.

Exemplo: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child. The parks I visited were mostly full of trees and lacked playgrounds, so I found them boring and had nothing to do.

Sugestão: Give a clear answer then explain with one or two concise, specific reasons. Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (conditional vs. present, article use). Use a linking word (for / because / and) to connect reasons coherently.

Exemplo: No, I still don’t enjoy parks because I find them dull and they often lack facilities. For example, there are seldom water fountains or cafés, which makes staying there inconvenient.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and avoid contradicting yourself. If you have mixed feelings, state that clearly and give balanced, specific reasons using linking words (however, although, because). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and choose precise vocabulary.

Exemplo: I have mixed feelings. On the one hand, I would like more parks because they provide green space and relaxation; however, on the other hand, too many small, poorly maintained parks might feel monotonous and rarely attract people.

Sugestão: Be clear and organized: start with a direct answer, then name a specific park and give concise reasons why you want to visit, using linking words to connect ideas. Correct phrasing (I want to visit, I learned about it) and reduce redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York in the future. I learned about it at university and I’m interested in its large lawns, historic features, and diverse activities, so I hope to see it in person one day.

× I didn't enjoy going to park.

✓ I didn't enjoy going to parks.

'Park' should be plural because the general activity of visiting parks uses the plural form to indicate places in general. Use 'parks' when speaking about visiting such places in general rather than one specific park.

× As I entered the park, there are just many trees and it is quite, it was quite tedious for me.

✓ As I entered the park, there were just many trees and it was quite tedious for me.

The sentence refers to a past time ('As I entered'), so the verb 'be' should be in the past tense 'were' not present 'are'. Keep tense consistent: 'were' and 'was' match the past reference.

× So of all of all, I didn't enjoy it.

✓ So overall, I didn't enjoy it.

The phrase 'of all of all' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'overall' to summarize a point. This fixes structure and clarity.

× No, I, I don't like going to parks.

✓ No, I don't like going to parks.

Repeated filler 'I, I' is not a grammatical error but is disfluent. Removing the repetition makes the sentence grammatically correct and fluent while keeping the present tense 'don't like' appropriate for current preference.

× Now, as I said, uh, nowadays a park, uh, it is quite, very boring for me to go to the park.

✓ Now, as I said, parks are quite boring for me to go to.

Use plural 'parks' to speak generally and use present simple 'are' for general truths. Avoid redundant phrases ('a park... the park') and unnecessary fillers for clarity.

× And if I was, if I'm thirsty, I, it is quite hard for me to find the water, find a white bottle of water.

✓ And if I'm thirsty, it is quite hard for me to find a bottle of water.

Use consistent tense ('If I'm thirsty') and remove 'the' before 'water' when speaking generally. 'White bottle' is unnecessary and may be incorrect unless color is relevant; 'a bottle of water' is the natural general phrasing.

× Uh no, I would like to see many more parks in the city as if there are more.

✓ No, I would like to see many more parks in the city if there were more.

The phrase 'as if there are more' is incorrect here. Use conditional 'if there were more' to express desire dependent on a hypothetical situation. 'Would like' pairs with a conditional clause.

× Although uh, parks can make keep us close and keep the calm and makes us all feel comfortable.

✓ Although parks can help keep us close and calm and make us all feel comfortable.

Use 'help keep' or 'keep' and ensure subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'parks' takes base verb 'make' not 'makes'. Also 'keep the calm' is unidiomatic; use 'keep us calm' or 'keep calm'.

× Umm, it also make our life uh, single and tedious.

✓ It also makes our lives single and tedious.

Subject 'it' requires third person singular 'makes'. Moreover 'life' referring to people plural should be 'lives'. Note: 'single' is unclear in this context; consider a different adjective like 'lonely' if intended.

× No, there aren't many.

✓ No, there aren't many parks.

The original sentence is incomplete; add the noun 'parks' so the existential 'there aren't many' clearly refers to parks.

× Oh yes, I have many. I have parks to want to go in the future.

✓ Oh yes, I have many. I have parks I want to go to in the future.

Phrase order and preposition placement are incorrect. Use 'parks I want to go to' to place the relative clause and preposition naturally. 'Have many' needs an object ('parks') to be clear.

× It's about the Central Park in America, as I have learned the passage in a through my university study and it shows about the Central Park and I was very, I'm very interested in it.

✓ It's about Central Park in America, which I learned about in a passage during my university studies, and I was very interested in it.

Remove the definite article before 'Central Park' when speaking generally; use 'learned about' to indicate the content of the passage and 'during my university studies' for natural preposition use. 'Shows about' is incorrect; use 'was interested in' or 'I found it very interesting'.

× So I will go there in the future.

✓ So I will go there in the future.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; 'will go' appropriately expresses future intention.