Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize the response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (two 'I remember'). Also correct minor naming/word choices and use past tense consistently.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks with my father when I was a child. For example, we often visited a park called Nile Filipino in Paranaka City, where I learned to ride my first bicycle. Those visits were memorable because the atmosphere was friendly and encouraging.

Sugestão: Provide a cohesive, grammatical answer: begin with a clear statement, then support with specific recent example using linking words. Fix unclear phrase 'park snow' and run-on fragments. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, when I visited Australia last month I went on many coastal walks in local parks and easily reached 10,000 steps a day. The climate there was cool and not humid, which made walking much more pleasant than in the Philippines.

Sugestão: Make your opinion clearer and avoid irrelevant details. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two concise reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'business minded there please'). Avoid overly personal future plans unless briefly relevant.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the Philippines is densely populated and green spaces are limited. Therefore, I think the government should prioritize creating parks to improve residents' quality of life and reduce overcrowding.

Sugestão: Be slightly more specific or give an example of the type of park or activity you'd like to try. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to add one supporting detail. Mentioning companions is fine but keep it brief.

Exemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind, but I would like to visit coastal or botanical parks in the future. For instance, I would enjoy strolling through a botanical garden with friends or my partner to relax and reach my daily 10,000-step goal.

× I still enjoy going to park snow.

✓ I still enjoy going to parks now.

The original sentence has article and word choice errors. 'going to park' requires the plural 'parks' or 'the park'; additionally 'snow' is likely a typo for 'now'. Use 'parks' to match general statement or 'the park' for a specific place. Suggestion: use 'parks' when speaking generally and 'now' for time reference.

× I remember getting by 10,000 steps a day.

✓ I remember getting about 10,000 steps a day.

The phrase 'getting by 10,000 steps' is incorrect. Use a preposition like 'about' or 'around' to indicate an approximate number. 'Getting about 10,000 steps a day' correctly expresses habitual past achievement.

× Achieved easily because the parks there are actually nice.

✓ I achieved that easily because the parks there are actually nice.

The original fragment lacks a clear subject and finite verb. Adding 'I' and the past tense verb 'achieved' creates a complete sentence that ties back to the previous idea (reaching 10,000 steps).

× It was cold and not humid unlike in the Philippines.

✓ It was cold and not humid, unlike in the Philippines.

This sentence needs a comma before 'unlike' to set off the contrasting phrase. The preposition use is acceptable, but punctuation clarifies the contrast. Alternatively, 'unlike the Philippines' is fine; adding the comma improves readability.

× I definitely want to see more parks wherever I'm living.

✓ I definitely want to see more parks wherever I live.

Use simple present 'I live' for general statements about where you reside. 'I'm living' (present continuous) implies a temporary situation, which conflicts with the general desire to have parks in the place you live.

× That's why to be honest I have plans of going or migrating to New Zealand because the Philippines is a densely populated place.

✓ To be honest, I have plans to move to New Zealand because the Philippines is densely populated.

The original is wordy and has awkward structure. Use 'to be honest' at the start with commas, 'plans to move' is the natural collocation (not 'plans of going or migrating'), and omit 'a' before 'densely populated' because it's an adjective phrase describing the country.

× I do not think that there will be parks created now by the government because I think Philippines is a more business minded there please compared to other countries.

✓ I do not think the government will create new parks now because I think the Philippines is more business-minded compared to other countries.

Multiple errors: word order and passive vs active ('parks created by the government' is clumsy; use 'the government will create new parks'), missing article 'the' before 'Philippines', incorrect insertion 'there please' likely a mistake, and 'business-minded' needs a hyphen and modifier position. The corrected sentence fixes preposition and article use, word order, and removes extraneous words.

× I remember going to Nile Filipino, which was a park located in Paranaka City, but it's now gone.

✓ I remember going to Nile Filipino, which was a park located in Paranaka City, but it is now gone.

This is minor: replace contraction 'it's' with 'it is' if a more formal tone is desired; however grammar is acceptable. Also ensure proper nouns are correct. No major article issue, but kept for consistency.

× I remember learning how to ride my first bicycle there and everyone seemed to be very supportive and happy with everything that's going on.

✓ I remember learning how to ride my first bicycle there, and everyone seemed very supportive and happy with everything that was going on.

Tense consistency: 'seemed' (past) should pair with 'was going on' (past progressive) rather than 'that's going on' (present). Also remove extra 'to be' after 'seemed' and add comma before 'and' for clarity.

× I was in Australia last month and all I did was go to parks and do coastal walks.

✓ I was in Australia last month and all I did was go to parks and take coastal walks.

'Do coastal walks' is non-idiomatic in English; 'take coastal walks' or 'go on coastal walks' are natural. Maintain past tense consistency.

× There is no specific park that I want to go to in the future, but I am always open to going to parks, strolling around with my friends and walking with my girlfriend to achieve that 10,000 steps per day.

✓ There is no specific park I want to go to in the future, but I am always open to visiting parks, strolling with my friends, and walking with my girlfriend to reach 10,000 steps per day.

Streamline phrasing: omit unnecessary 'that' after 'park', use parallel gerund forms 'visiting', 'strolling', 'walking', and use 'reach' instead of 'achieve' for step counts. This improves clarity and parallelism.