Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Keep your answer focused and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details (when, who, what you did) using a linking word. Avoid long multi-clause sentences and minor grammar errors.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me on weekends as a reward for good school results, and I especially enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the flower beds.

Sugestão: Be direct and use clearer comparisons between past and present. Begin with a concise topic sentence (e.g., “I still like parks, but for different reasons.”), then use linking words (however, whereas, now) and give specific current activities. Reduce fillers like “uh” and avoid repeating phrases.

Exemplo: I still like parks, but for different reasons. Whereas I used to play and meet friends as a child, now I mainly go for brisk walks and light exercise, which helps me stay healthy.

Sugestão: Use clear, accurate vocabulary and fully formed sentences. Start with a direct answer (e.g., “Yes, I would.”), then give two specific reasons with correct word choice and linking words (for example: “because parks reduce pollution and provide public spaces”). Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. Parks help reduce air pollution and provide green public spaces for relaxation, and having more parks would make the city more attractive to residents and tourists.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct in naming places and use conditional language simply. Start with a clear statement, then give a specific park name and a brief reason using linking words. Avoid hesitation phrases and fix grammar (e.g., “I don’t know many parks worldwide” and “I would choose X National Park because…”).

Exemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind at the moment because I haven't researched parks worldwide. However, if I had to choose, I would visit Yosemite National Park because it is home to diverse and sometimes rare species and beautiful landscapes.

× I remember being taken to the park by my parents, especially on weekends, as a gift for my high scores at school, so back then I really enjoyed going there.

✓ I remember being taken to the park by my parents, especially on weekends, as a reward for my high scores at school, so back then I really enjoyed going there.

The phrase 'as a gift for my high scores' is not idiomatic; 'reward' is the correct noun. This is not a verb form error but falls under choice of word; however, it does not violate listed grammar types, so minimal change was made to keep tense and structure. Use 'reward' for something given in recognition of achievement. Grammar problem type ID:10

× A little bit, but the purpose of going to the park may change a little bit if it was in my childhood.

✓ A little bit, but the purpose of going to the park may have been different in my childhood.

The original mixes present modal 'may' with past conditional 'if it was in my childhood', creating tense mismatch. Change to 'may have been different' to express that the purpose in the past was likely different. This corrects tense consistency and uses the present perfect modal construction. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Uh, I would like to go to the park to play more outdoor activities and meet new friends, but now I just enjoy walking in the park as one of my exercise.

✓ Uh, I would like to go to the park to do more outdoor activities and meet new friends, but now I just enjoy walking in the park as part of my exercise.

Use 'do' with 'activities' rather than 'play' when referring to various outdoor activities. Also 'one of my exercise' is ungrammatical; use 'part of my exercise' to indicate a component of a routine. This fixes verb + gerund usage and article/phrase choice. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Definitely yes, because park plays a very important role in reduced depo pollution and also Democrat spaces.

✓ Definitely yes, because parks play a very important role in reducing air pollution and in creating public green spaces.

Original has singular 'park' with plural sense and wrong verb agreement. Use plural 'parks play'. 'Reduced depo pollution' is incorrect wording; 'reducing air pollution' is correct. 'Democrat spaces' is incorrect; likely meant 'public green spaces' or 'community spaces'. This fixes subject-verb agreement and incorrect word choice. Grammar problem type ID:27

× The city has a more the more attractive they become to other tourists.

✓ The city becomes more attractive to tourists as a result.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant. Rephrase to a clear subject-verb structure: 'The city becomes more attractive to tourists' conveys the intended meaning. This fixes sentence structure and clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I actually have nothing in mind now 'cause I don't know much UMM parks around the world.

✓ I actually don't have anything in mind now because I don't know many UMM parks around the world.

Use 'don't have anything in mind' rather than 'have nothing in mind' for conversational tone; 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. Also use 'many' with countable plural 'parks' rather than 'much'. This corrects modal/quantifier and word choice. Grammar problem type ID:4

× However, if I had to choose, I would definitely choose UMM National for National Park where which is a home to a lot of species including rare one.

✓ However, if I had to choose, I would definitely choose UMM National Park, which is home to many species, including rare ones.

Original has redundant and incorrect phrasing: 'for National Park' and 'where which' are wrong. Use relative clause 'which is home to' and plural 'rare ones'. Also use 'many species' instead of 'a lot of species' for formal correctness. This fixes pronoun/relative pronoun misuse and noun number. Grammar problem type ID:12