Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and varied in sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition of 'used to' and avoid exact times unless relevant.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went there with my parents and met my friends, and we played on the swings and climbed trees. Because the park was near my house, it became our regular meeting place after school.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and split long sentences for clarity. Use linking words (for example, 'so' or 'therefore') and give one specific reason or activity to support your answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially with my four-year-old son. We usually go around 5 pm, and I often invite his friends so he can play with them while I walk around the park to relax.

Sugestão: Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid grammar errors (subject–verb agreement) and reduce repetition ('it's').

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there is only one park now and it is far from my home. If every neighborhood had a small park, children could play safely close to home and parents would not need to drive long distances.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give specific features you want, using linking words like 'for example' or 'so that'. Use correct modal verbs ('would like' rather than 'should have') and avoid vague phrasing like 'to the fullest'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a child-friendly park near my house in the future. For example, it could have safe swings, soft flooring and low benches so that young children can play safely and parents can supervise them easily.

× Yes, I love to visit the park.

✓ Yes, I loved visiting parks as a child.

The student is answering a past-time question (Did you like going to parks as a child?). The original sentence uses present simple 'love', which conflicts with the past context. Use past tense 'loved' and the gerund 'visiting' for habitual past actions.

× As a child, I used to look forward to going to the park with my friends at exactly 5:00 PM in the evening, I used to go to the park with my parents.

✓ As a child, I used to look forward to going to the park with my friends at exactly 5:00 PM; I also used to go to the park with my parents.

The original is a run-on with comma splice. Replace the comma with a semicolon or separate into two sentences, and add 'also' to show both activities. Maintain past habitual 'used to'.

× I used to meet my friends and have a great time.

✓ I used to meet my friends and have a great time.

This sentence is correct. It correctly uses the past habitual 'used to' plus base verbs to describe repeated past actions. No change needed.

× Yes, I do like to visit the park with my four year old son.

✓ Yes, I do like to visit the park with my four-year-old son.

The tense 'do like' is acceptable for emphasis in present, but the sentence had punctuation/word-form error: ages used as modifiers require hyphens 'four-year-old'. Also 'park' vs 'the park' is fine. Use hyphens when the age phrase modifies a noun.

× We generally visit the park at around 5:00 PM and I make it a point that I'll call all his friends so that they also visit the park the same time and he has a good time with his friends while I'll take a walk around the park.

✓ We generally visit the park at around 5:00 PM, and I make it a point to call all his friends so that they also visit the park at the same time and he has a good time with them while I take a walk around the park.

Problems: awkward clause 'make it a point that I'll call' should be 'make it a point to call'; 'the same time' needs 'at'; 'he has a good time with his friends' is repetitive—use 'them' to avoid repetition; 'while I'll take' should be 'while I take' because 'while' introduces simultaneous action and does not use future with 'will'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes I would like to see more parks in my city since currently there's only one which is quite far from my house and have to drive till there with my four year old son.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city since currently there's only one, which is quite far from my house and I have to drive there with my four-year-old son.

Issues fixed: missing comma before 'which' (non-defining clause), missing subject 'I' before 'have to drive', unnecessary 'till' replaced by 'there', and hyphenation for 'four-year-old'. Keep present simple for current situation.

× So it would have been better if every sector had a small park so that the it's more accessible to the child and it's more safe it's away from the road.

✓ So it would be better if every sector had a small park so that it is more accessible to children and safer because it would be away from the road.

Multiple issues: tense and modality—use 'would be' for hypothetical present/future preference; remove extra 'the' before 'it's'; change 'the child' to plural 'children' for general statement; 'more safe' should be 'safer'; combine ideas clearly and use 'because' to explain reason. Also avoid repeated 'it's'.

× Yes, I would prefer to have a more child friendly park just beside my house.

✓ Yes, I would prefer to have a more child-friendly park right beside my house.

Hyphenate 'child-friendly' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. 'Just beside' is acceptable but 'right beside' is more natural. Tense/modal 'would prefer' correctly expresses preference.

× I should have all the swings so that the child enjoys it to the fullest and also it is more accessible to all the children in the neighborhood.

✓ It should have plenty of swings so that children can enjoy it to the fullest, and it is more accessible to all the children in the neighborhood.

Problems: 'I should have' is incorrect subject—park, not speaker, should have swings; 'all the swings' is unnatural—use 'plenty of swings'; 'the child enjoys it' is specific—use plural 'children can enjoy it'; avoid 'it is more accessible to all the children' repetition—keep concise. Maintain modal and present for preference/future facility.