Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Good content and clear memories; to improve, make the response slightly more concise and correct small grammar issues (use past tense consistently and include a clear topic sentence). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My family often had picnics where we played Frisbee and hide-and-seek, and I enjoyed exploring the flower beds and watching birds because it felt peaceful and adventurous.

Sugestão: Strong, coherent response with clear reasons and a suggestion; improve by starting with a direct topic sentence, tightening phrasing, and using one linking connector to show cause and effect. Avoid overly long sentences by splitting if needed.

Exemplo: Not really — the parks near my home are poorly maintained. As a result, the lawns are patchy and many trees have been removed, so I miss walking there on weekends and think the local council should plant trees and upgrade facilities.

Sugestão: Clear opinion and useful examples; improve by giving a concise topic sentence, using linking words (for example, moreover), and being specific about how parks benefit different groups. Avoid vague phrases like "which is always a good idea."

Exemplo: Yes, I would — more public green spaces bring many benefits. For example, well-designed parks with walking paths and seating would encourage families and older adults to exercise, relax, and spend time away from screens.

Sugestão: Good specific choice and motivation; improve accuracy and grammar (use correct tense and clearer phrasing), and add one linking phrase to explain your reason. Avoid factual exaggeration — be precise about the sanctuary's role.

Exemplo: Yes. I plan to visit the eagle sanctuary in Davao, in the south of the Philippines, because it rescues threatened eagles. I would like to support their conservation work and learn more about these birds' behavior and habitat.

× When I was young, family and I went for picnics where we played games like Frisbee and hide and seek, and I loved exploring the flowers and watching birds because it felt peaceful and adventurous.

✓ When I was young, my family and I went for picnics where we played games like Frisbee and hide-and-seek, and I loved exploring the flowers and watching birds because it felt peaceful and adventurous.

The sentence omits the possessive pronoun before 'family'; 'family and I' should be 'my family and I' to correctly indicate possession. Also, 'hide and seek' is commonly hyphenated as 'hide-and-seek' when used as a compound noun. Suggestion: add the possessive 'my' and hyphenate compound game names to improve clarity and correctness.

× The parks near my home are poorly maintained, the lawns are patchy and many trees have been removed, so they're not as lovely as they used to be.

✓ The parks near my home are poorly maintained; the lawns are patchy, and many trees have been removed, so they are not as lovely as they used to be.

The original uses the contraction 'they're' which is acceptable, but the sentence is a run-on with comma splices. Also 'they are' is clearer in formal speech. Fix punctuation by separating independent clauses with a semicolon or periods and keep subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: use proper punctuation and avoid comma splices to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× For example, a park with walking paths in the playground would encourage families and older people to exercise and relax.

✓ For example, a park with walking paths and a playground would encourage families and older people to exercise and relax.

The original phrase 'walking paths in the playground' implies the playground contains walking paths, which is unlikely. Reordering and adding 'and a' clarifies there are walking paths and a playground as separate features. This corrects article and noun phrase structure to match intended meaning. Suggestion: reorder noun phrases and include appropriate articles to express separate facilities.

× Yes, I'm thinking of visiting the eagle sanctuary in Davao, the South of the Philippines.

✓ Yes, I'm thinking of visiting the eagle sanctuary in Davao, in the south of the Philippines.

The phrase 'the South of the Philippines' is awkward; 'in the south of the Philippines' or 'in southern Philippines' is grammatically correct. Use lowercase 'south' when used as a direction rather than a proper region name. Suggestion: use 'in the south of the Philippines' or 'in southern Philippines' for natural preposition and capitalization.

× It rescued eagles and they were saved from extinction.

✓ It rescues eagles that were saved from extinction.

The original mixes tenses and unclear subject reference. If referring to the sanctuary's ongoing role, present simple 'rescues' is appropriate; 'that were saved' clarifies the eagles' past rescue. Alternatively, if describing past actions, use 'It rescued eagles that were saved from extinction.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and clarify which verbs describe ongoing roles versus completed actions.