Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer direct and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation and repetition. Use simple past tense for childhood and link ideas with a short reason (e.g., “because” or “so”).

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my family in the evenings, and we would walk around the paths and sit by the pond because the fresh air and open space felt relaxing.

Sugestão: Answer directly using present tense and concise language. Explain a specific reason and give a short example. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “head schedule”). Use linking words like “because” or “when.”

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go when I feel stressed because walking among trees and breathing fresh air helps me relax and clear my mind.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and one specific reason with coherent linking. Use correct vocabulary (parks, nature) and avoid contradictions. Keep it to two sentences max: topic sentence + reason or example.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because having more green spaces would make the city cleaner and give people more places to relax. For example, small neighborhood parks would be great for families and for people who want a short break outdoors.

Sugestão: Respond directly and use clearer phrasing. If you mean you have no time, say so with a brief reason and, if possible, a contrasting short prediction (e.g., maybe in holidays). Avoid double negatives and unclear phrases like “headed schedule.”

Exemplo: Not at the moment, because my schedule is very busy with work and study. However, I might visit some parks during a holiday or a long weekend when I have more free time.

× Whenever as a child, I definitely like to, to visit them in the park with my family member and with my family, uh, because in the evening time, I'm usually, uh, I usually visit to walk here throughout there and.

✓ Whenever I was a child, I definitely liked to visit parks with my family in the evenings because I usually went for walks there.

The student is talking about childhood, so past tense is required. 'Whenever as a child' is ungrammatical; use 'Whenever I was a child' or 'When I was a child'. 'Like' should be past 'liked'. 'Visit them in the park' is awkward; use 'visit parks' or 'visit the park'. 'Family member and with my family' is redundant; 'with my family' is sufficient. 'I usually visit to walk here throughout there' is ungrammatical and contains incorrect verb patterns; use 'I usually went for walks there'. Suggestions: identify time frame first (past), use past tense verbs consistently, remove redundancies, and use natural collocations like 'go for a walk' or 'went for walks'.

× I just I like to to I like to do to the part nowadays because of my head schedule.

✓ I still like going to the park nowadays, but my busy schedule makes it difficult.

The student attempts to describe a present habit but repeats words and uses incorrect nouns. 'I just I like to to I like to do to the part' is ungrammatical; use 'I still like going to the park'. 'Head schedule' is incorrect—likely 'busy schedule'. Use present tense for current habits ('like going'). Suggestions: simplify the sentence, avoid repetitions, and use correct collocations like 'busy schedule' and 'go to the park' or 'going to the park'.

× Whenever, whenever I'm filled and depressed, I definitely like to do to the part.

✓ Whenever I feel tired or depressed, I like to go to the park.

Repetition and incorrect word forms: 'filled' is wrong form for emotion—use 'feel'. 'Do to the part' is ungrammatical; use 'go to the park'. Use present simple for habitual reactions (Whenever I feel ..., I like to ...). Suggestions: use correct verbs ('feel', 'go'), remove repeated words, and keep structure 'Whenever + subject + verb, subject + verb'. Also prefer specific adjectives 'tired' rather than 'filled'.

× Do that some fresh air.

✓ I do that to get some fresh air.

Missing subject and incorrect verb form. 'Do that some fresh air' lacks purpose connector 'to' and needs an infinitive to show purpose: 'do that to get some fresh air'. Use complete clause with subject 'I' if needed, or attach purpose to previous sentence. Suggestions: use 'to get' or 'for' to express purpose and include subject when standalone.

× I just I like to see more parts than before it was of the nature.

✓ I would like to see more parks than before because they have more natural areas.

Confusing tense and wrong words: 'I just I like to see' should be 'I would like to see' to express preference about the present/future. 'Parts' is incorrect for 'parks'. 'It was of the nature' is ungrammatical; express reason with 'because they have more natural areas' or 'because of nature'. Suggestions: use 'would like' for polite expressions, correct noun 'parks', and give a clear reason clause 'because...'.

× Whenever I see nature I am more excited and I feel more peaceful and not nature.

✓ Whenever I see nature, I feel more excited and peaceful.

Redundant and contradictory phrase 'and not nature' is incorrect. Use present simple 'I feel' for habitual reactions. Combine adjectives 'excited and peaceful' without extra words. Suggestions: remove 'not nature', use commas for clarity, and keep verb tense consistent.

× No, I don't think so that I don't do you in any part in my future because of my headed schedule that I have.

✓ No, I don't think I will go to any parks in the future because of my busy schedule.

Incorrect modal/time expression and wrong nouns: 'I don't think so that I don't do you' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't think I will go'. Use future 'will' to talk about future plans. 'Any part' should be 'any parks'. 'Headed schedule' is incorrect; use 'busy schedule'. Suggestions: use 'I don't think I will...' for future predictions, replace incorrect nouns, and use 'busy schedule' for meaning.