Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar/word-order errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "I do like" and "I personally like").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes and skies, because the light and cloud formations change quickly, so I try to capture those moments when I'm free. For example, last weekend I photographed a sunset that had vivid orange and purple tones.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, linked reasons with specific details. Remove filler phrases ("or," "and yeah") and avoid repeating similar ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are much more peaceful and visually appealing. For instance, the countryside usually has clearer air and open fields, which offer unobstructed mountain and sky views, unlike crowded city streets.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly, then support it with specific, well-organized details. Use linking words (for example, because, for instance) and correct phrasing (e.g., "I prefer views in my own country because..."). Avoid repetitive phrases like "a lot".

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has spectacular mountain scenery. For example, the Himalayas, including Everest and Annapurna, offer dramatic vistas and hiking opportunities, which attract many tourists who come specifically to take photos.

× I do like taking pictures of different views.

✓ I do like taking pictures of different views.

This sentence is correct. 'Do like' is used for emphasis and 'taking' correctly uses the verb + -ing form for an activity (gerund). No change needed.

× I personally like photography and so I'm very interested in taking pictures of beautiful scenes or anything.

✓ I personally like photography, so I'm very interested in taking pictures of beautiful scenes or anything interesting.

The original sentence has a minor style/structure issue: the conjunction 'and so' is redundant. Replacing with a comma and 'so' creates clearer connection. Also adding 'interesting' after 'anything' improves naturalness. This follows sentence structure rules (ID 26).

× I usually during my free time I look at the sky and sometimes capture those moments to.

✓ Usually during my free time, I look at the sky and sometimes capture those moments too.

Problems: word order and 'to' at end is incorrect; 'usually' should be at sentence start or before verb, and 'too' (meaning 'also') is correct spelling. This fixes sentence structure and uses correct adverb placement (ID 20) and verb + -ing where applicable.

× I personally prefer the views in the OR rural areas because not only is it very peaceful there, but it's also very beautiful because it is less polluted and also not filled with many buildings or infrastructures.

✓ I personally prefer views in rural areas because not only are they very peaceful, but they are also more beautiful since they are less polluted and not filled with many buildings or infrastructure.

Errors: 'OR' is incorrect filler; subject-verb agreement with plural 'views' requires 'are' not 'is' (ID 27). 'It is less polluted' should match plural 'they are'. 'Infrastructures' is usually uncountable 'infrastructure'. Also simplify redundant 'because' and 'also'. This addresses conjunction use (ID 16) and subject-verb agreement (ID 27).

× And yeah.

✓ And yes.

This fragment is informal and not a grammatical sentence; replacing with 'And yes' or omitting is better. It's a discourse marker rather than a tense error; recommended to avoid fragmented responses in formal tests (ID 6/26).

× I prefer views in my own country which is look at our country.

✓ I prefer views in my own country; let me talk about my country.

Original contains ungrammatical phrase 'which is look at our country' — incorrect structure (ID 26). Rewriting clarifies intent: introducing discussion about home country.

× Nepal has a lot of mountains like Himalaya, Everest mountain, Annapurna mountains and so a lot of even a lot of tourists come here just to take pictures and go on hikes just to view the amazing views.

✓ Nepal has many mountains such as the Himalayas, Mount Everest, and the Annapurnas, so many tourists come here just to take pictures and go on hikes to enjoy the amazing views.

Multiple issues: use 'many' for countable plural (ID 14), correct names ('the Himalayas', 'Mount Everest', 'Annapurnas') and plural agreement. Remove redundancy 'a lot of even a lot of'. Use 'to enjoy' rather than repeated 'just to view'. This addresses quantifier use (ID 14), proper nouns and pluralization (ID 1), and sentence structure (ID 26).