Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using a linking word. Avoid repeating similar words (e.g., “very”). Also keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I often photograph interesting or beautiful scenes because I want to preserve the memory. For example, when I visit a seaside village I take photos of the sunset and the fishing boats to remember the atmosphere.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer, then give one clear reason with a linking word and a specific detail or comparison. Correct grammar (e.g., "more greenery" not "much greenery") and avoid repetition of phrases like "rural areas" too often.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they usually have more greenery and open space. For instance, I enjoy photos of rolling fields and forests, which feel calmer and more picturesque than crowded city streets.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one specific, well-structured reason using linking words. Avoid vague phrasing and grammar errors (e.g., "throw litter" not "throw litters"). Provide a concise example rather than two similar complaints.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I find they are often cleaner and better preserved. For example, when I visited a national park abroad the paths were tidy and there was less air pollution, which made the scenery much more enjoyable.

× Yes I do. I usually like to take pictures of the views that are very interesting and are very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually like to take pictures of views that are very interesting and beautiful.

Redundant use of 'are' and article 'the' before 'views' is unnecessary. Use plural noun without 'the' for general preference. Remove the second 'are' and the extra 'very' to make the sentence more natural: 'views that are very interesting and beautiful.' Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I want to keep the memory of that view, so I usually take it.

✓ I want to keep the memory of that view, so I usually take a photo of it.

The phrase 'take it' is unclear because 'take' needs a direct object that matches context. Use 'take a photo of it' to specify action. This corrects the verb phrase and object usage and makes the meaning explicit.

× I prefer views in the rural areas because I think that there are much greenery in rural areas than urban areas and the view feels very fascinating in the rural areas rather than urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I think there is more greenery there than in urban areas, and the scenery feels more fascinating in rural areas than in urban areas.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'rural areas', wrong quantifier 'much greenery' (use 'more greenery' for comparison), missing preposition 'in' before comparison target, and awkward repetition. Use 'there is' for uncountable 'greenery' and 'more... than' for comparison. Replace 'the view feels' with 'the scenery feels' and streamline repetition.

× I prefer views in other countries because in my opinion in my country there is a lot of pollution which can make a beautiful view also feel bad.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, in my opinion, in my country there is a lot of pollution that can make a beautiful view look unpleasant.

Use 'that' (or 'which') to introduce restrictive clause but avoid 'also feel bad' which mixes 'view' with 'feel'. Use 'look unpleasant' to describe appearance. Add commas around 'in my opinion' for clarity.

× And for example in the cities the people throw litters in front of the beautiful places that make them ugly.

✓ For example, in cities people throw litter in front of beautiful places, which makes them ugly.

Problems: unnecessary 'the' before 'cities' and 'the people'; 'litters' is incorrect pluralization — 'litter' is uncountable; sentence structure improved by using a relative clause 'which makes them ugly.' Add commas and remove leading 'And' to sound more formal.