Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar by using one clear topic sentence, correct word forms, and a short supporting detail. Avoid repetition (e.g., mentioning phone twice) and reduce filler. Use a linking word to connect idea and reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. I often use my phone to capture scenes because they act as memories, so whenever I look at them I can vividly remember the place and the atmosphere.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence stating preference, then add one or two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Correct word choices (e.g., 'countryside' not 'countryside areas view') and avoid filler sounds.

Exemplo: I prefer countryside views to urban ones because they are more peaceful and full of nature. For example, I enjoy the fresh air, open fields and quiet, which help me relax and enjoy the moment.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer, then provide specific examples and correct grammar (e.g., 'I can find various types of scenery'). Keep sentences short and coherent, and use linking words to organize examples. Avoid unclear phrases like 'fill this in such an sunshine.'

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide range of scenery. For example, I can find mountains, riversides, countryside and vibrant cities, and visiting a mountain in summer lets me enjoy warm sunshine and great hiking trails.

× Yes definitely. I'm a photo addicted person so I would like to take various kind of pictures in my phone which kept as memory in my phone and whenever I see that picture I remember that views.

✓ Yes, definitely. I'm addicted to photography, so I like to take various kinds of pictures on my phone which are kept as memories, and whenever I see those pictures I remember the views.

Original contains word order and word choice errors: 'photo addicted person' is incorrect; use 'addicted to photography'. 'Various kind' should be 'various kinds' (plural) and 'pictures in my phone' should be 'on my phone'. 'kept as memory in my phone' needs passive verb and plural: 'are kept as memories'. 'that picture' should match plural 'those pictures' and 'remember that views' should be 'remember the views'. Suggestions: use natural noun phrases ('addicted to photography'), ensure plural agreement for count nouns, use correct prepositions ('on' for devices), and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× Well, I prefer countryside areas view because it creates natural view and gives very pleasant environment as well as we can enjoy the moment.

✓ Well, I prefer countryside views because they are natural and create a very pleasant environment, and we can enjoy the moment.

Errors: 'countryside areas view' is ungrammatical; use 'countryside views'. 'creates natural view' should be 'are natural' or 'create a natural view'. 'gives very pleasant environment' needs article and agreement: 'create a very pleasant environment'. Also plural subject requires plural verbs: 'they are' or 'they create'. Suggestions: use correct noun phrases ('countryside views'), include articles where needed ('a very pleasant environment'), and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Moreover, countryside views are very natural and full of uh.

✓ Moreover, countryside views are very natural and full of life.

Original ends abruptly with 'uh' and lacks a completed idea. 'Full of uh' is filler; replace with a meaningful noun like 'life' or 'greenery'. Suggestions: avoid filler words in formal speech and complete the sentence with a clear noun or descriptive phrase.

× Yes, definitely I prefer views of my country where I can found various where I various type of views such as mountains, Riverside, countryside and urban areas.

✓ Yes, definitely. I prefer views in my country, where I can find various types of scenery such as mountains, riversides, countryside, and urban areas.

Multiple errors: 'views of my country' can be 'views in my country'; 'I can found' should be 'I can find' (past/present confusion and wrong verb form). 'various where I various type of views' is garbled; use 'various types of scenery'. 'Riverside' should be plural or 'riversides' or 'river views'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms ('find'), correct plural forms ('types'), and simplify to a clear noun ('scenery').

× For example if I went to mountain area I can fill this in such an sunshine.

✓ For example, if I go to a mountain area, I can feel this in the sunshine.

Problems: tense mismatch—'if I went' (past) with 'I can' (present) creates a conditional error. Use present simple in a real conditional: 'if I go... I can'. 'mountain area' needs article 'a'. 'fill this in such an sunshine' has wrong verb 'fill' and article 'such an' before a consonant sound; likely intended 'feel this in the sunshine'. Suggestions: use consistent conditional tense (first conditional or general present), choose correct verbs ('feel') and correct articles ('the sunshine').