Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 文法と語順の誤りを減らし、簡潔で自然な表現にしましょう。例えば「memorize」は写真の文脈では少し不自然なので“remember”や“keep as a memory”を使い、不要な繰り返し（I I）や冗長なフレーズを省いてください。また、トピック文の後に1〜2文で理由や具体例を付けて、全体を3文程度にまとめると効果的です。さらに接続詞（because, so, therefore）を適切に使い、論理を明確にしてください。

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like to keep them as memories. For example, when I visit a new place I often take several shots to remember the atmosphere and colors. This helps me recall the experience later.

Sugestão: 表現を簡潔にし、単複や冠詞の誤りを直しましょう（the urban areas → urban areas, the peoples → people）。理由を述べる際は接続詞を整理して論理を明確にし、具体的な例（建築様式、街の雰囲気、人々の活動）を一つ示すと良いです。感情表現は“like the atmosphere”など自然なフレーズに置き換えてください。

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because cities have interesting buildings and lively streets. For example, I enjoy photographing old facades and people walking in cafés since they show everyday life and atmosphere. Those details make my photos more vivid.

Sugestão: 語順や冗長な表現を直し、名詞の複数形や冠詞（temple → temples, shrine → shrines）を正しく使いましょう。感情を表すフレーズは自然な英語に置き換え（“it gives me a sense of Japanese identity”）、一文で明確に理由を述べ、もう一文で具体例（好きな寺や景色）を加えると説得力が増します。

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Japan has many traditional temples and shrines that reflect our culture. For instance, photographing a quiet shrine at sunrise helps me feel connected to Japanese history and traditions.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I want to memorize the views that I I looked to before when I when it goes in the future.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I want to remember the views that I saw before for the future.

The sentence contains multiple issues: incorrect verb forms and redundant words. 'Memorize' is usually used for committing information to memory; 'remember' fits better for recalling scenes. 'Looked to' is incorrect: the past simple 'saw' should be used (see -> saw). Remove duplicated words 'I I' and 'when I when it goes' which are redundant and ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'remember' and 'saw' and simplify the clause to 'for the future' or 'to remember them in the future.'

× So I like taking a picture of the different views.

✓ So I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural when speaking generally about taking more than one photograph. Use 'pictures' to match the plural noun 'views'. Also omit the definite article 'the' before 'different views' for general reference.

× I prefer views in the urban areas more than a rural area because it has a lot of buildings and also the peoples.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas more than in rural areas because they have a lot of buildings and also people.

Do not use the definite article 'the' with general nouns 'urban areas' and 'rural areas'. Use plural consistency: compare 'urban areas' with 'rural areas'. 'It has' is incorrect for plural 'areas' so use 'they have'. 'Peoples' is rarely used for 'people' (plural of person); use 'people'.

× So I like since I like to take a picture of a buildings and the people that I can feel the humans living.

✓ I like to take pictures of buildings and people because I can feel the life of the city.

Several issues: pronoun and article misuse and awkward phrasing. 'A buildings' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'buildings'—use 'pictures of buildings'. 'The people' can be 'people' in general. 'I can feel the humans living' is unnatural; use 'I can feel the life of the city' or 'I can feel people living there.' Suggest simplifying to a natural English expression.

× I like Urban Air.

✓ I like urban areas.

'Urban Air' is unclear and seems to be a mistranslation. If the student means the atmosphere of the city, use 'urban areas' or 'the urban atmosphere'. Capitalization: 'urban' should not be capitalized unless part of a proper noun.

× I prefer views in my own country because my country, Japan has a lot of traditional buildings such as temple and shrine so I and it gives me a spirit of a Japanese so I like country of my own own.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because my country, Japan, has a lot of traditional buildings such as temples and shrines, so it gives me a sense of Japanese spirit; I like my own country.

Multiple article and plural errors: 'temple and shrine' should be plural 'temples and shrines' when speaking generally. Insert commas around the appositive 'Japan'. 'A spirit of a Japanese' is incorrect: 'a sense of Japanese spirit' or 'a sense of being Japanese' is natural. 'Country of my own own' is redundant; use 'my own country'. Also adjust sentence structure with commas or semicolons to join clauses properly.