Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct plural and article errors (e.g., "pictures," "a sunset," "flowers," "rivers"). Avoid trailing fragments at the end.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets, rivers and fields of flowers, and then I share the best shots on social media so my friends can see them.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence stating a clear preference, avoid repetition, and give specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar ("rural areas," "there is," "original photos") and avoid vague endings. Limit to up to five sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because the surroundings are peaceful and less crowded. For instance, the quiet fields and old trees create unique scenes that I can photograph, and these original photos often get a good response when I post them on Instagram.

Sugestão: Give a balanced, concise answer: state your overall preference, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar ("other countries," "cultures," "traditions," remove duplicate words). Mention concrete examples of what you would like to experience.

Exemplo: I like my country, but I prefer visiting other countries because I want to experience different cultures and traditions. For example, I would love to sample local cuisines in Japan and attend traditional festivals to meet new people and learn about their customs.

× Yes, I really like taking picture of different views because they help me to preserve my memories and I often share photos on my social media so my friends can see them.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve my memories, and I often share photos on my social media so my friends can see them.

Use plural 'pictures' because 'taking' implies multiple photos; also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help' (help me preserve) and add a comma before the conjunction for clarity. Grammar issue: singular/plural mismatch.

× And I really enjoy taking picture of Sunset flower River especially jungles or.

✓ And I really enjoy taking pictures of sunsets, flowers, rivers, especially in jungles.

Use plural nouns 'pictures', 'sunsets', 'flowers', 'rivers' to match general activities. Add preposition 'in' before 'jungles' and remove trailing 'or'. Also capitalisation corrected to lowercase for common nouns. Grammar issue: incorrect use of adjectives/nouns and missing preposition.

× I really enjoy rural area because the environment is very peaceful in there and I really enjoy there.

✓ I really enjoy rural areas because the environment there is very peaceful and I enjoy being there.

Use plural 'rural areas' to refer generally; move 'there' position and change 'enjoy there' to 'enjoy being there' for grammatical correctness. Grammar issue: singular/plural mismatch.

× It makes my heart very happy and peaceful.

✓ It makes me feel very happy and peaceful.

Use 'makes me feel' to correctly express the effect on the speaker. 'Makes my heart very happy' is idiomatic but less direct; 'feel' is clearer and grammatically standard. Grammar issue: incorrect use of prepositions/idiomatic expression.

× I really enjoy taking picture there because the picture is very original and we can share them on insta social.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures there because they are very authentic and we can share them on Instagram.

Use plural 'pictures' and refer back with 'they' or 'them'. Replace 'original' with 'authentic' for naturalness and use proper name 'Instagram'. 'Insta social' is incorrect. Grammar issue: singular/plural mismatch.

× I especially take a picture.

✓ I especially like to take pictures of the scenery.

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Expand to express preference and use plural 'pictures' and specify object 'of the scenery' to complete meaning. Grammar issue: sentence structure/incomplete sentence.

× Honestly speaking, I really like my country but I want to be in other country because I want to explore their culture, tradition and one more thing I really want to try their local cuisine and and I want to meet many people.

✓ Honestly speaking, I really like my country, but I want to be in another country because I want to explore its culture and traditions. I also want to try the local cuisine and meet many people.

Use 'another country' not 'other country' for a singular alternative. Match pronoun 'its' to the singular 'country' (not 'their'). Use plural 'traditions' and remove duplicate 'and'. Split into two sentences for clarity and add 'the' before 'local cuisine'. Grammar issue: incorrect use of pronouns and articles/sentence structure.