Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammatical errors, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition (e.g., remove duplicate words and redundant phrases). Also use more accurate vocabulary (e.g., "atmosphere" singular, "take photos" not "click some pictures"). Aim for 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I don't usually take many photos; I prefer to enjoy a view with my own eyes. However, I sometimes take a few photos to keep as memories, so I can look back later and remember how the place felt.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use plural/singular appropriately) and avoid repetition. Use precise descriptive vocabulary (e.g., "untouched, natural, unspoiled") and combine short sentences for fluency.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they are more natural and unspoiled. For example, rural landscapes often have open fields and forests that are largely untouched by people, which makes them feel peaceful and fresh.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence then specific supporting details. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., "a wide variety of landscapes", avoid repeating words). Use linking words such as "because" and "for example" to make reasons coherent. Mention concrete examples of landscapes to sound precise.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, where I live in India you can find snowy mountains, deserts, forests and lush plains, so I can see many different types of scenery without traveling abroad.

× I like to enjoy the scenery by seeing myself and and feeling the surrounding atmospheres atmosphere.

✓ I like to enjoy the scenery by seeing it and feeling the surrounding atmosphere.

Repeated 'and' is a typo and 'seeing myself' is incorrect here; use 'seeing it' (the scenery). 'Surrounding atmospheres' should be singular 'surrounding atmosphere' to match the uncountable sense. Use the present participle 'feeling' correctly to show simultaneous actions. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, use appropriate pronoun for the noun (it), and keep 'atmosphere' singular for general environment.

× But I click some pictures to save it as a memory so whenever I want to recall that memory I can see that photos.

✓ But I take some pictures to save them as memories, so whenever I want to recall those moments I can look at the photos.

Pronoun and number mismatch: 'it' does not agree with plural 'pictures'; use 'them'. 'A memory' should be plural 'memories' or rephrased. 'See that photos' mixes singular demonstrative 'that' with plural 'photos'; use 'the photos' or 'those photos'. Also 'click' is informal; use 'take' or 'shoot'. Suggestion: Match pronouns and nouns in number and use consistent demonstratives.

× I prefer views in rural areas because it is not the artificial.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are not artificial.

Incorrect article and adjective usage: 'the artificial' is incorrect; use the adjective 'artificial' directly with plural noun 'views' -> 'they are not artificial.' Also 'views in rural areas' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they'. Suggestion: Make pronoun number agree with noun and avoid unnecessary articles before adjectives.

× It is totally natural which is made by itself.

✓ They are completely natural and occur on their own.

Awkward structure: 'which is made by itself' is unnatural. Use a clearer clause: 'occur on their own' or 'exist naturally.' Also match plurality: 'they' for 'views.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('completely natural', 'occur on their own') and correct subject-pronoun agreement.

× It is not touched by humans, not by any other machines.

✓ They are not touched by humans or by machines.

Pronoun number mismatch: use 'they' for 'views.' 'Not by any other machines' is wordy; use 'or by machines.' Suggestion: Keep pronoun number consistent and simplify conjunctions.

× It is like it is like raw.

✓ They are like that — raw and untouched.

Repetition 'it is like it is like' is redundant. Also 'raw' is colloquial; clarify 'raw and untouched' or 'untouched and natural.' Use plural 'they' for views. Suggestion: Remove repetition and use clearer adjectives.

× I prefer views in my country because in my country there is every type of views from snow to desert, from forest to afforestation, every type of visible.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it has every type of scenery — from snow to desert, from forests to planted woodlands; every kind is visible here.

Article and noun form errors: 'there is every type of views' mixes singular 'there is' with plural 'views' — use 'it has' or 'there are'. 'Afforestation' is an abstract noun; use 'planted woodlands' or 'afforested areas.' 'Every type of visible' is ungrammatical; use 'every kind is visible.' Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement, choose appropriate nouns for physical landscapes, and reorder for clarity.

× As I live in in India it's a very large country so I prefer views in my country.

✓ Since I live in India, it's a very large country, so I prefer views in my country.

Typo 'in in' should be 'in'. Use 'since' or 'because' for reason clauses. Add commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words and punctuate complex sentences.