Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevap daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirilmeli; dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi düzeltilmeli. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kullanın, gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve destekleyici bir neden ile bir örnek ekleyin. Ayrıca dolgu kelimelerini (uh, um) azaltın ve 'views' veya 'scenery' gibi doğru terimleri kullanın. Örnek adımlar: 1) Konu cümlesiyle doğrudan cevap verin. 2) Bir veya iki destekleyici neden verin ve bağlaç kullanın. 3) Kısa bir örnek veya sonuç ekleyin.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural scenery. I like to capture unique moments because photos help me remember how a place felt. For example, last year I photographed a sunset at the lake, and the colors made the scene unforgettable.

Sugestão: Cevap belirsiz ve dil bilgisi hataları içeriyor; hangi tür manzarayı tercih ettiğinizi net bir konu cümlesiyle belirtin. 'Winter areas' ifadesi muğlak; muhtemelen 'rural' veya 'natural' demek istediniz. Bir neden ve kısa örnek ekleyin, ayrıca uygun bağlaçlar kullanın (because, so, therefore).

Exemplo: I prefer rural and natural areas because I find the countryside more peaceful and visually appealing. For instance, walking through a forest or by a lake usually gives me better photo opportunities than a busy city street.

Sugestão: Cevap mantıklı ama tekrarlı ve dolgu kelimeleri fazla; cümle yapısını düzeltin ve daha spesifik bilgi verin (hangi yerlerden söz ediyorsunuz?). Konu cümlesiyle doğrudan başlayın, bir neden verin ve bir örnek ile tamamlayın. Gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve 'people talk about' yerine kendi deneyiminiz veya gözleminizi kullanın.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because there are many beautiful places I haven't visited yet. For example, people often recommend the northern coastal region for its dramatic cliffs and clear water, so I'm eager to photograph those landscapes when I travel there.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different ways, especially when I like scenery.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I see beautiful scenery.

The student used 'ways' instead of 'views' and 'when I like scenery' is ungrammatical. Use the noun 'views' for visual scenes. 'When I see beautiful scenery' correctly links the action of seeing to taking pictures. Use 'see' (verb) rather than 'like' in that clause to express the triggering event.

× I would like to keep my own to the unique moments and a breathtaking will make me feel, uh, make me feel special.

✓ I would like to keep my own photos of unique moments because a breathtaking view makes me feel special.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect phrases ('keep my own to the unique moments', 'a breathtaking will make me feel'). Rephrase to 'keep my own photos of unique moments' and use 'because' to show reason. Use simple present 'makes' for general truth and remove filler words.

× I prefer winter areas in the nature attracts me and give me opinion about natural beauty.

✓ I prefer winter areas in nature because they attract me and show natural beauty.

The phrase 'in the nature' is incorrect; use 'in nature'. The clause needs conjunction 'because' to connect reasons. 'Give me opinion about' is unnatural; 'show natural beauty' or 'appeal to me' is correct. Also ensure subject agreement: 'they attract me' refers to 'winter areas'.

× I prefer it in my own country because, uh, I haven't seen so many places in my own country.

✓ I prefer it in my own country because I haven't seen many places there.

Use 'many places' rather than 'so many places' for naturalness; add 'there' to avoid repetition of 'in my own country'. The present perfect 'haven't seen' is appropriate for experiences up to now.

× There are some places, uh, where people talk about the nature is wonderful and they take some photographs of these places and it's amazing.

✓ There are some places where people say that the nature is wonderful; they take photographs of these places, and it's amazing.

Original sentence incorrectly joins clauses and misuses 'talk about the nature is wonderful'. Use 'say that the nature is wonderful' or better 'say that the scenery is wonderful'. Use proper conjunctions or punctuation to separate ideas: a semicolon or conjunctions plus commas. This clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure.