Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence saying you enjoy taking photos, then give one or two specific reasons with clearer phrasing and correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid vague words like "general." Keep answers under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, when I visit a temple or a festival, I take pictures so I can remember the colors and atmosphere later.

Sugestão: Organize the reply: begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific supporting details linked with words like "because" and "for example." Use natural phrases (e.g., "less polluted" instead of "come clean") and avoid repeating the same connector twice.

Exemplo: I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because they are less polluted and more peaceful. For example, clear blue skies and scenic mountains create calm, photogenic scenes that help me relax and take better photos.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly with a complete sentence: state your preference (own country or other countries) and give one specific reason or brief example. Avoid incomplete sentences and provide at least one supporting detail.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best local spots and their seasons. For instance, I can capture the monsoon clouds in Kerala or the golden light at the Taj Mahal at sunrise.

× Very much actually I want to take pictures because it will create a general for me for the future.

✓ Very much. Actually, I want to take pictures because they will create a record for me for the future.

The student used 'it' and 'a general' incorrectly. 'Pictures' is plural, so refer with 'they' (subject-pronoun agreement; problem type 12 and 27) and use a correct noun like 'record' instead of 'general'. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use plural pronouns to match 'pictures' and choose appropriate nouns. Note: This suggestion corrects agreement and word choice while keeping present/future intent.

× I can go back to those pictures and remember the times and moments that I loved in my country other.

✓ I can go back to those pictures and remember the times and moments I loved in my country and elsewhere.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and a misplaced word 'other'. This is a sentence structure problem (type 26) and also a word choice/preposition issue (type 11). 'In my country other' is ungrammatical; use 'in my country and elsewhere' or 'in my country and other countries'. Suggestion: reorder the phrase and use 'elsewhere' or 'other countries' to make meaning clear.

× I prefer more taking pictures in rural areas because they come clean, because there is no pollution.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because they are cleaner and there is no pollution.

'Prefer more taking pictures' is unnatural; use 'prefer taking pictures' (sentence structure and adverb use, types 13 and 26). 'They come clean' is incorrect; use comparative adjective 'cleaner' to compare rural areas with others (type 25). Suggestion: use 'prefer' + gerund correctly and use comparative adjective 'cleaner'.

× The environment is very good, the sky is blue, the mountains are white and blue and I feel relaxed there.

✓ The environment is very good, the sky is blue, the mountains are white and the sea is blue, and I feel relaxed there.

The sentence is mostly grammatical but unclear: 'mountains are white and blue' is odd unless describing snow and sky; likely intended to contrast mountains and sea or sky. This is a clarity/word choice issue (type 13). Suggestion: specify what is blue (sea or sky) or say 'the mountains are white from snow and the sky is blue' to be precise.

× I prefer more taking pictures in rural areas because they come clean, because there is no pollution. The environment is very good, the sky is blue, the mountains are white and blue and I feel relaxed there.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because they are cleaner and there is no pollution. The environment is very good; the sky is blue, the mountains are white with snow, and I feel relaxed there.

Combined sentences had redundancy and awkward phrasing. This is sentence structure (type 26) and adjective choice (type 13). Suggestions: remove 'more' after 'prefer', use comparative 'cleaner', and clarify 'mountains are white' by adding 'with snow' or similar detail for clarity and accuracy.

× I live in India and I have.

✓ I live in India, and I have visited other countries.

The clause 'and I have' is incomplete and lacks a main verb or object (type 23). The student likely intended to say they have visited other countries. Suggestion: complete the clause with the appropriate verb phrase, e.g., 'have visited other countries' or 'have been to other countries' to make a full sentence.