Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조를 더 자연스럽게 고치고 중복을 줄이세요. 현재 답변은 접속사 사용이 부적절하고 몇몇 부분이 어색합니다. 주제문으로 바로 시작한 뒤, 짧은 이유와 구체적인 예시 또는 계획(어떤 기술을 향상시키고 싶은지, 어떻게 연습할지)을 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 'I love taking photos'로 시작하고, 'however'를 사용해 약점을 설명한 뒤, 구체적인 개선 방법(예: composition, lighting 연습) 을 말하면 더 명확합니다.

Exemplo: I love taking photos of different views; however, I know my technical skills are weak. For example, I often struggle with composition and lighting, so I plan to practice framing and study basic exposure settings to improve.

Sugestão: 의미 전달은 되지만 문장이 어색하고 반복이 있습니다. 이유를 말할 때 구체적인 요소(예: architecture, street life, contrast) 를 하나 또는 두 개로 좁혀 설명하고, 연결어(for example, because, which) 를 자연스럽게 사용하세요. 마지막 문장은 주어와 동사를 포함한 완전한 문장으로 바꾸세요.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because cityscapes offer dynamic elements like modern architecture and busy streets. For example, tall buildings and moving cars create strong contrasts that make photos more interesting.

Sugestão: 중복되는 표현('because I think' 등)을 줄이고 문장을 명확하게 만드세요. 주어-동사 일치와 관사 사용에 주의하고, 구체적인 이유(예: cultural context, familiarity with locations) 와 예시(특정 도시나 자연 명소 이름)를 제시하면 답변이 설득력 있어집니다.

Exemplo: I prefer photographing scenes in my own country, Korea, because I understand the cultural context and know interesting locations. For example, I can capture Seoul's neighborhoods and Jeju Island's natural landscapes with more meaningful composition.

× As I love to take pictures of different views, but I think my skills for taking pictures are pretty bad, so I would like to improve my skills.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views, but I think my photography skills are pretty bad, so I would like to improve them.

The original sentence contains a fragment and an incorrect use of the conjunction 'As' together with 'but', causing a run-on and awkward structure. Remove the redundant 'As' and combine ideas clearly. Also replace repetitive phrase 'skills for taking pictures' with 'photography skills' and use the pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: start simply ('I love taking pictures...') and join contrasting idea with 'but'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer views in urban areas because I believe that the expression that urban areas gives is very special, for example cars or big buildings. Make the picture very special.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I believe the atmosphere they create is very special, for example cars or tall buildings, which can make a picture very distinctive.

The phrase 'the expression that urban areas gives' is ungrammatical: 'expression' is not the best noun and 'gives' does not agree with 'areas' in this structure. Use 'the atmosphere they create' where 'they' correctly refers to 'urban areas'. 'Big buildings' is fine but 'tall buildings' is more natural. Also combine fragments into one coherent sentence instead of a fragment 'Make the picture very special.' Grammar problem type ID:13

× I prefer view in my own country, Korea, because I think I can express more about Korea because I know well for example, the city of Korea or. The natural views of Korea.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, Korea, because I think I can express more about Korea since I know its cities and natural scenery well.

The original uses singular 'view' incorrectly; 'views' (plural) matches the context. The phrase 'know well for example, the city of Korea or. The natural views of Korea.' is fragmented and ungrammatical. Combine into a single sentence, use 'its' to refer to Korea, and 'cities and natural scenery' is a natural collocation. Also use 'since' or 'because' once to avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:1