Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer, grammatical and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct pronouns and verb forms, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and long awkward phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph clouds and changing weather because I find the patterns fascinating and they help me study how the weather develops. Also, I keep these photos to compare changes over time.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and then two concise supporting points with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid hesitations and vague phrases; use specific vocabulary (e.g., 'cleaner air', 'wildlife').

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer more greenery and abundant wildlife. For instance, our rural town has open fields and many bird species, and the air feels cleaner, which makes it more pleasant to photograph.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct common mistakes (e.g., 'traveled abroad', 'enough'). Give one clear reason and a short example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to structure your response.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I have never traveled abroad and I want new experiences. For example, I would love to see coastal towns in Greece to compare their architecture and landscapes with those at home.

× Definitely yes, taking picture is my one of her pastime activity and I love to keep pictures of many different views so that I can analyze them also use for understand the changing weather condition.

✓ Definitely yes, taking pictures is one of my pastimes and I love to keep pictures of many different views so that I can analyze them and use them to understand changing weather conditions.

Pronoun and possessive errors: 'my one of her pastime activity' mixes pronouns and word order. Use 'one of my pastimes' for correct ownership and idiom. Also pluralize 'picture(s)' and 'conditions' for general reference. Add 'them' to refer back to pictures and add 'to' before 'understand'.

× That's why most of the pictures are of clouds as well as changing weather condition I love to keep.

✓ That's why most of the pictures I keep are of clouds and changing weather conditions.

Word order and quantifier: 'most of the pictures are of clouds as well as changing weather condition I love to keep' is awkward. Put the relative clause 'I keep' after 'pictures' and use 'changing weather conditions' (plural) for general phenomena. Use 'and' rather than 'as well as' for simpler coordination.

× I prefer rural areas because it has incredible green space and a treasure trove of hues biodiversity which is not possible in the urban area.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they have incredible green spaces and a treasure trove of biodiversity, which is not possible in urban areas.

Agreement and plurality: 'rural areas' is plural so use 'they' and plural noun forms 'green spaces' and 'urban areas'. 'hues biodiversity' is incorrect word order; use 'a treasure trove of biodiversity'.

× This is only reason why we shifted from urban area to Asami rural area.

✓ This is the main reason we moved from the city to rural Assam.

Awkward structure and article use: Use 'the main reason' for clarity. 'Shifted from urban area to Asami rural area' is unnatural; 'moved from the city to rural Assam' is concise. Also correct proper noun 'Assam' and placement of 'rural'.

× Moreover, its environment is more clean.

✓ Moreover, its environment is cleaner.

Comparative adjective: Use 'cleaner' instead of 'more clean'. Also 'its' refers to the region; ensure context makes reference clear.

× I love to see the view of other countries because I have never traveled to abroad.

✓ I would love to see the views of other countries because I have never traveled abroad.

Preposition error: Use 'traveled abroad' not 'traveled to abroad'. Use 'views' plural for general experiences and 'would love' to express preference politely.

× I have explored my country much sufficient.

✓ I have explored my country quite sufficiently.

Adverb and modifier order: 'much sufficient' is incorrect. Use 'quite sufficiently' or 'enough' to modify 'explored'. Present perfect 'have explored' fits the context.

× So I'm really looking for some new thing as well as experiment with my traveling.

✓ So I'm really looking for something new and to experiment with my travel.

Gerund/infinitive use: 'looking for something new' is correct; 'experiment with my traveling' is awkward—use 'experiment with my travel' or 'experiment in my travels'. Keep parallel structure: 'looking for... and to experiment' or 'looking to... and experiment'.

× So watching a view of another country would be a fun for me.

✓ So seeing the sights of another country would be fun for me.

Article and collocation: 'a fun' is incorrect; use 'fun' without article. 'Watching a view' is unnatural—use 'seeing the sights' or 'seeing the views'. 'Another country' fits, and keep 'would be fun for me'.