Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, grammar and organization. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronouns, and avoid redundancy. Add one or two specific details using a linking word (e.g. “for example” or “because”) and keep it under five sentences. Also use more precise vocabulary like “scenery” or “landscapes” and say why the photos matter.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel to a new city I photograph its skyline and street scenes because they help me remember the atmosphere and the places I visited. I also take close-up shots of architectural details to capture unique features.

Sugestão: Answer directly with first person, give a clear preference or say you like both with reasons. Use linking words (however, although, because) and give one specific example to support your choice. Avoid vague or impersonal language.

Exemplo: I don't have a strong preference; I like both urban and rural views. Urban scenes interest me because of the architecture and lively streets, while rural landscapes appeal to me for their peaceful fields and natural beauty.

Sugestão: Correct serious vocabulary errors ("abuse" is incorrect) and speak in full, coherent sentences. State your preference clearly and give a reason with a linking word (because, but, however). Provide a specific example of what you like about local views and what you'd like to see abroad. Keep it natural and concise.

Exemplo: I enjoy the scenery in my country because I am familiar with its traditions and landscapes, but I would also like to visit other countries to experience different cultures and coastal views. For instance, I would love to photograph the historic streets of Europe and the tropical beaches of Southeast Asia.

× Yes I do, when I go to a new place or different place, I like the pictures, different views because it's his memories so that they can visit them sometime.

✓ Yes, I do. When I go to a new or different place, I like to take pictures of the views because they are my memories so that I can visit them sometime.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns ('his' and 'they' referring to the pictures) which causes confusion; this is an Incorrect use of pronouns error. Also there are style issues: run-on sentence and awkward word order. Corrections: replace 'his' with 'my' to show possession by the speaker, change 'they can visit them sometime' to 'I can visit them sometime' so the subject is consistent, and rephrase to 'I like to take pictures of the views' for natural English. Add punctuation and articles where needed.

× He can't differentiate urban areas or rural areas, but anything will do.

✓ I can't differentiate between urban and rural areas, but anything will do.

The original uses 'He' incorrectly to refer to the speaker; this is an Incorrect use of pronouns error. Also missing the preposition 'between' when comparing two items. Corrections: change 'He' to 'I' to match the speaker, add 'between' and simplify 'urban areas or rural areas' to 'urban and rural areas' for natural phrasing.

× Umm. I love abuse here in our country but I would love to visit in other countries to see their views and oh.

✓ Umm. I love living here in our country, but I would love to visit other countries to see their views.

The sentence contains an incorrect word 'abuse' which is likely a mispronunciation or wrong word choice; this falls under Incorrect use of pronouns/word choice context because the pronoun 'their' is used correctly but the noun is wrong. Replace 'abuse' with 'living' or 'being' to express enjoyment of being in the country. Also remove the extra 'in' after 'visit' (we 'visit other countries', not 'visit in other countries') and drop the filler 'and oh' for clarity. Ensure subject and verb agreement and natural word order.