Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid odd word choices (e.g. “language, space”), and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel I always carry a camera to capture colorful street scenes and scenic landscapes, because photos help me remember the atmosphere of each place.

Sugestão: Make the answer grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to add reasons or examples, and correct awkward phrases (e.g. “being natural”, “talking land space”). Mention a concrete example and avoid incomplete sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I like natural scenery such as mountains and beaches. For instance, I enjoy photographing wide fields at sunrise since the soft light and open space create dramatic images.

Sugestão: Good idea but refine vocabulary and be more specific. Use correct collocations (e.g. “landscapes”, “historic cities”), add a linking phrase and one specific detail about why those views appeal to you.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because travelling lets me discover different landscapes and cultures. For example, I love New Zealand’s dramatic mountains for their sheer scale, and Europe’s historic city centers for their charming architecture and narrow streets.

× I always carry a camera when I travel so I can capture interesting language, space and local things to remember the trip.

✓ I always carry a camera when I travel so I can capture interesting landscapes, local scenes and things to remember the trip.

The student used 'language, space' which are incorrect word choices and forms for this context. 'Landscape' and 'scene' are the correct nouns to describe views; use plural forms 'landscapes' and 'scenes' to match the general meaning. Replace 'local things' with 'local scenes' or keep 'things' but 'local scenes' is more precise. Suggestion: Use vocabulary appropriate to photography (landscape, scene) and ensure plural forms when referring to general kinds of things.

× I prefer views in rural area because I enjoy being natural such as mountains and beaches.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural places such as mountains and beaches.

The phrase 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally. 'Enjoy being natural' is incorrect; the student likely means 'enjoy natural places' or 'enjoy nature.' Change 'being natural' to 'natural places' and add plural for 'rural areas.' Suggestion: Use plural when speaking generally and choose the correct noun phrase ('nature' or 'natural places').

× I also like talking land space photograph there although capturing the perfect light can be.

✓ I also like taking landscape photographs there, although capturing the perfect light can be difficult.

This sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors. 'Talking land space photograph' is ungrammatical; the intended verb is 'taking' and the object should be 'landscape photographs.' The clause 'capturing the perfect light can be' is incomplete and needs an adjective like 'be difficult.' Suggestion: Use the verb 'take' for photos and the noun 'landscape photograph(s).' Complete clauses with appropriate adjectives (difficult, challenging, tricky).

× I prefer views in other countries because I love to travel and experience different land spaces and cultures.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love to travel and experience different landscapes and cultures.

'Land spaces' is not a natural collocation in English; 'landscapes' is the correct plural noun to describe different types of land/views. Use the plural to match 'different.' Suggestion: Use common collocations like 'landscapes' for natural scenery.

× For example, I enjoy seeing the dramatic mountain in New Zealand and the historic city space in Europe.

✓ For example, I enjoy seeing the dramatic mountains in New Zealand and the historic cityscapes in Europe.

'The dramatic mountain' and 'the historic city space' are awkward and singular. When speaking generally, use plurals: 'mountains' and 'cityscapes.' 'Cityscape' is the correct noun for views of a city. Also match plural nouns with the general preference expressed earlier. Suggestion: Use plural nouns and correct collocations: 'dramatic mountains' and 'historic cityscapes.'