Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., “I often take photos of beautiful scenery or everyday moments”).

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I often take photos of beautiful scenery and everyday moments; for example, I recently photographed a sunrise at the seaside. Taking pictures helps me remember special scenes and improves my photography skills.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, grammatical topic sentence and give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and fillers. For example, say why rural areas appeal to you (e.g., quieter, more greenery) and give a brief example.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they have more greenery and a calmer atmosphere. For instance, I enjoy photographing rice fields and small villages since the natural light and peaceful settings create beautiful images.

Sugestão: Make a clear comparison and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “because” and “also,” but limit to two supporting points with specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., “there is a lot of greenery” and “traditional architecture”).

Exemplo: I prefer views in my country, Japan, because there is a lot of greenery in rural areas and many interesting city buildings. For example, I love photographing traditional wooden houses in the countryside and modern city skylines in Tokyo.

× Yes I do. I I often take a photo or what I see and like beautiful scenery or umm daily memory.

✓ Yes, I do. I often take photos of scenes I like, such as beautiful scenery or everyday moments.

The original contains repetition ('I I'), awkward structure ('take a photo or what I see and like'), and incorrect noun forms. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use plural 'photos' for general habits, use a clear relative clause ('scenes I like') and parallel nouns ('beautiful scenery' and 'everyday moments').

× I prefer views in umm rural rural areas because there are more nature than the city and.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there is more nature than in the city.

The sentence misuses prepositions and has redundancy ('rural rural') and a comparison error. This fits Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11) and also subject-verb agreement but primary fix is preposition. Use 'in rural areas' and compare 'more nature than in the city.' Also use 'there is' with uncountable 'nature.' Remove trailing 'and.'

× It has been.

✓ (Remove this fragment)

'It has been' is an incomplete sentence fragment that doesn't convey meaning. This is an Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs / sentence structure issue (ID 13 and 26), but primary correction is to remove the fragment or complete the thought (e.g., 'It has been nice to visit.' if intended). Suggested action: delete the fragment if unnecessary or complete the sentence with a clear verb and object.

× I prefer views in my country Japan, because there are many green nature in the in the rural areas and also many buildings in the city and also there are beautiful traditional.

✓ I prefer views in my country, Japan, because there is a lot of green nature in the rural areas, many buildings in the city, and beautiful traditional places.

Multiple errors: incorrect preposition and article use ('in the in the'), count/uncount noun agreement ('many green nature' should be 'a lot of green nature' or 'many green areas'), repetition, and an incomplete noun at the end ('beautiful traditional' needs a noun). Primary category is Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). Suggestions: add commas around apposition 'Japan', use 'there is' with uncountable 'nature' or 'many green areas', remove duplicate words, and supply the missing noun such as 'places' or 'buildings' to finish 'beautiful traditional places.'