Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is slightly repetitive and contains minor grammar issues. Make a concise topic sentence, avoid repeating ideas, and add one specific example to enrich your answer. Use a linking phrase for smooth flow.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography lets me capture the beauty of nature and everyday life. For example, last month I photographed a sunrise over a river and the light on the water made the scene unforgettable.

Sugestão: Your answer states a preference but is vague and repetitive. Provide a clear topic sentence, explain one or two specific reasons with linking words, and give a concrete example to support your opinion. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'more developed' instead of 'it is more developed area').

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, I like photographing old buildings next to modern skyscrapers, which creates interesting visual contrasts.

Sugestão: The answer gives a preference and attempts to give examples, but it has grammatical errors and unclear wording. State the main reason clearly, use linking words (for example), and name specific examples more accurately (e.g., 'religious sites' or 'traditional festivals'). Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it has a rich mix of cultures and religious sites. For example, I enjoy photographing colorful Punjabi festivals and the architecture of Hindu temples because they show unique local traditions.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I love capturing beauty of nature, people, environment etcetera as well as it is my passion also.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I love capturing the beauty of nature, people, and the environment; it is also my passion.

Missing definite articles before 'beauty of nature' and 'environment' and awkward conjunctions. Use 'the beauty of nature' and 'the environment' to refer to specific general concepts. Replace 'etcetera' with a cleaner list and move 'also' to natural position. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I feel like it is more developed area and it is more beautiful area that enhance the beauty of area.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I feel they are more developed and more beautiful, which enhances the area's appearance.

Incorrect singular/plural reference and word forms: 'it is more developed area' should use plural pronoun 'they' or 'they are' and include articles. 'that enhance the beauty of area' uses plural verb 'enhance' with unclear subject; use 'which enhances the area's appearance' to agree in number and improve clarity.

× So I will capture the moments of that area.

✓ So I capture moments in those areas.

The original 'I will capture' implies future but speaker is describing a habitual preference; present simple 'I capture' is more appropriate. Use 'those areas' to match plural 'urban areas' and 'capture moments in' is more natural than 'of that area'.

× I prefer views in my country because there are so many modern cultures and religious in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country because there are so many modern cultures and religions there.

Redundant phrase 'in my country' repeated; 'religious' is an adjective but a noun 'religions' is required. Replace the second clause ending with 'there' to avoid repetition.

× For example cultures or traditional like Punjabi culture, Hindu culture and various different cultures.

✓ For example, traditional cultures like Punjabi culture, Hindu culture, and many others.

Awkward ordering and incorrect use of 'or' and 'traditional'. Use 'traditional cultures like' and 'many others' or 'various cultures' for clarity. Add commas for list punctuation.