Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be precise and natural: correct mistakes (e.g., 'you' -> 'them', 'it give' -> 'it gives'), avoid redundancy and keep answer within 3–4 clear sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., 'serene', 'scenic').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets because they look very serene and the colours are beautiful. Also, taking photos of quiet landscapes helps me relax after a busy day.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity: use a clear topic sentence ('I prefer rural views'), then give concise reasons with linking words ('because', 'also'). Avoid repetition and fix errors (e.g., 'no noise of traffic' -> 'less traffic noise'). Use more precise adjectives ('peaceful', 'less polluted').

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and have less traffic noise. Additionally, the countryside is less polluted and often more colourful, with fields and forests that feel refreshing.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repetition: state your preference directly ('I prefer views in other countries') then give two specific reasons with linking words ('because', 'for example'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'other countries', 'a wide variety'). Use concrete examples of types of views to support your point.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer a wider variety of landscapes and cultural scenes. For example, I enjoy visiting coastal towns and mountain villages abroad because each place has unique architecture and scenery to photograph.

× Yes I always prefer taking pictures of you as they are so satisfying and peaceful.

✓ Yes, I always prefer taking pictures of nature/landscapes as they are so satisfying and peaceful.

The student used 'you' incorrectly to refer to views; this is a pronoun misuse. 'You' refers to a person, while the context requires a noun or pronoun for views (e.g., 'nature' or 'landscapes'). Suggestion: use a clear noun that matches the subject (views), and add a comma after 'Yes' for punctuation.

× I love watching the sunset as it give me another level of satisfaction and it's very calm type of activity which we can do in evenings.

✓ I love watching the sunset as it gives me another level of satisfaction, and it's a very calm activity that we can do in the evenings.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the third-person singular subject 'it' (sunset). Also, 'type of activity' is awkward; 'a very calm activity' is better, and add 'the' before 'evenings'. Combine clauses with commas for clarity.

× I always like to have rural area views as there are no noise of traffic and apart from this they are from they are away from the cities which are have a huge traffic and pollution so they are more vibrant to us.

✓ I always prefer rural views because there is no traffic noise, and they are away from cities, which have heavy traffic and pollution, so they feel more pleasant to us.

Multiple issues: 'no noise of traffic' is awkward—use 'no traffic noise' (quantifier/word choice). 'They are from they are away' is repetitive and incorrect sentence structure; simplify to 'they are away from cities.' 'Have a huge traffic' should be 'have heavy traffic.' Replace 'more vibrant to us' with 'feel more pleasant to us' for clarity. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct quantifiers like 'no' with uncountable noun 'traffic noise.'

× I will prefer other country as they give me vast variety of views and scenes which are more satisfying rather than visiting in my own country.

✓ I prefer other countries because they offer me a much wider variety of views and scenes, which I find more satisfying than visiting my own country.

Using 'will prefer' is unnatural for a general preference; use present simple 'prefer.' 'Other country' should be plural 'other countries.' 'Give me vast variety' should be 'offer me a much wider variety.' Also avoid 'rather than visiting in my own country'—use 'than visiting my own country.' Tense: present simple expresses general preferences.

× So I will definitely prefer other country as they are more relaxing and I have a lot of the different variety of the places to visit.

✓ So I would definitely prefer other countries because they are more relaxing and I have a wide variety of places to visit.

Again, use 'would' or present 'prefer' for preference; 'other country' should be 'other countries.' 'A lot of the different variety of the places' is incorrect quantifier and word order; use 'a wide variety of places' or 'many different places.' Simplify sentence structure for clarity.