Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 어색하고 중복 표현이 많습니다. 답변은 직접적으로 질문에 대한 주제문으로 시작하고, 이유를 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항으로 뒷받침하세요. 불필요한 'umm'과 반복을 줄이고 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요. 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

Exemplo: No, I don't usually take pictures of views because I prefer experiencing them directly. For example, when I travel I like to sit and enjoy the scenery rather than spend time framing shots. So I often leave my camera in my bag and just remember the moments.

Sugestão: 의견은 제시되었지만 이유가 불분명하고 문법적 오류와 중복이 많습니다. 명확한 주제문을 사용하고, 이유를 두세 개의 구체적 예시(예: 공기, 소음 수준, 자연 풍경)로 뒷받침하세요. 연결어(because, because of, therefore)를 사용해 논리 흐름을 개선하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because the countryside feels calmer and cleaner than the city. For instance, there's less noise and more open space, which helps me relax. Therefore I often choose rural areas when I want to enjoy a peaceful scene.

Sugestão: 의견은 분명하지만 문장이 어색하고 시제와 비교 표현에 오류가 있습니다. 비교 문장을 올바르게 구성하고, 구체적인 이유(예: 다양한 풍경, 건축 양식)와 예시를 하나 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 현재·과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer more varied landscapes and architecture. For example, when I traveled to Italy I loved the historic buildings and coastal scenery, so I took many photos there. That's why I usually take more pictures abroad than at home.

× Umm, actually I don't like taking a picture of the views cause umm, I think it's. Not necessary and I like the the seeing the views. Beautiful views in my eyes.

✓ Umm, actually I don't like taking pictures of views because I think it's not necessary and I like seeing the beautiful views with my own eyes.

Multiple issues: 1) Singular and plural issue (ID 1) — 'a picture' should be 'pictures' because speaking generally. 2) Incorrect use of conjunctions/ sentence structure (ID 16 and 26) — 'cause umm, I think it's. Not necessary' is fragmented; combine into one sentence using 'because' and 'it's not necessary'. 3) Incorrect use of articles/adjectives (ID 13 and 22) — extra 'the the' and 'the seeing' are wrong; use 'seeing' without 'the' and 'beautiful views' without extra article. 4) Sentence structure and word order — 'Beautiful views in my eyes' is ungrammatical; correct to 'the beautiful views with my own eyes' or 'beautiful views to me'. Suggestions: use plural 'pictures' for general habits; avoid filler words and sentence fragments; remove duplicate words; place adjectives before nouns and use correct prepositional phrase 'with my own eyes'. Grammar problem type: 1,16,22,13

× Umm, it's maybe rural areas cause uh, I leave the urban area for a long time so it's not beautiful for me as I think so rural area is not. Friendly for me so I like it.

✓ Umm, maybe rural areas, because I have lived in an urban area for a long time so it is not beautiful to me; rural areas feel more friendly, so I prefer them.

Issues: 5) Present perfect/past tense usage (ID 5 and 6) — 'I leave the urban area for a long time' should be 'I have lived in an urban area for a long time' to express continuing experience. 1) Singular and plural issue (ID 1) — mix of 'rural areas' and 'rural area'; keep plural 'rural areas' or singular consistently. 12) Incorrect use of pronouns/subjects — 'it is not beautiful for me as I think' is awkward; use 'not beautiful to me'. 26) Sentence structure errors — fragmented 'so rural area is not. Friendly for me' must be combined and punctuated correctly. Suggestions: use present perfect for duration up to now, maintain consistent number (plural/singular), and join fragments into clear sentences. Grammar problem type: 5,1,12,26

× I prefer views in other countries than my country because. My country is not beautiful as I think, so when I go travelling I took a lot of picture in other countries and I liked that more than my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to those in my country because I don't think my country is very beautiful, so when I travel I take a lot of pictures in other countries and I like those more than the views in my country.

Problems: 26) Sentence structure and punctuation — 'because.' breaks the sentence incorrectly; combine clauses. 25) Incorrect comparison object (ID 19/25) — use 'prefer A to B' and 'those in my country' to compare views. 5/6) Tense errors (ID 5 and 6) — 'when I go travelling I took a lot of picture' mixes tenses; use present simple for habitual action: 'when I travel I take a lot of pictures'. 1) Singular and plural issue (ID 1) — 'a lot of picture' should be 'a lot of pictures'. 13) Adjective/adverb usage — 'I liked that more than my country' unclear; specify 'I like those more than the views in my country'. Suggestions: use correct comparative structure 'prefer X to Y', maintain consistent tense for habits (present simple), use plural 'pictures', and clarify comparison targets. Grammar problem type: 26,19,6,1,13