Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (when/why/how). Limit to 3–4 sentences and remove fillers like “Umm.”

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I started as a child and now treat photography as a hobby because it helps me notice details in everyday life. For example, I often capture sunsets and street scenes to practice composition and lighting.

Sugestão: Clarify and correct grammar, use linking words and provide a specific reason or example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid awkward phrasing like “it's energized you.”

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and full of natural light. For instance, photos of fields and forests remind me of fresh air and open space, which makes me feel relaxed and inspired.

Sugestão: Make your answer clearer and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and one example. Avoid vague phrases and run-on sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer photographing views in my own country because it has many diverse landscapes. For example, I often visit historical towns and coastal areas with friends to capture panoramic scenes and local architecture.

× Sure, I'm fond of capturing photos and I remember when I was child.

✓ Sure, I'm fond of capturing photos and I remember when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. Use 'a child' for singular noun. Suggestion: include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns.

× I'd like to become a great photographer when I grow older.

✓ I'd like to become a great photographer when I grow up.

Phrase 'grow older' is acceptable but native speakers more commonly say 'grow up' when referring to becoming an adult. No grammar error but stylistic improvement: use 'grow up' for clarity.

× Umm, it's one of my favorite hobbies to take great photos.

✓ Umm, taking great photos is one of my favorite hobbies.

Infinitive 'to take' is grammatically possible but the gerund form 'taking' is more natural as the subject of the sentence. Reorder for clarity and naturalness.

× I prefer views in rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas.

Sentence is correct; no change needed.

× I think even by looking at the pictures, you feel the fresh air and sunshine and it's energized you.

✓ I think even by looking at the pictures, you feel the fresh air and sunshine and it energizes you.

'It's energized you' is ungrammatical: incorrect verb form and pronoun use. Use present simple 'energizes' for general truth and correct subject 'it'. Also place verb after subject.

× So I think I am more connected with a picture of rural areas.

✓ So I think I am more connected to pictures of rural areas.

Preposition 'with' is less natural here; use 'connected to' and plural 'pictures' to match general meaning. Use plural when speaking generally.

× I like it is surrounded by green area.

✓ I like that it is surrounded by green areas.

Sentence structure incorrect: use 'that' to introduce clause, and 'green areas' plural or 'green area' with an article. Also 'I like it is...' should be 'I like that it is...'. Suggestion: use 'that' and correct noun number.

× I like to take a picture of my country.

✓ I like taking pictures of my country.

Use gerund 'taking' or plural 'pictures' to express habitual action. Original 'to take a picture' is not wrong but gerund sounds more natural for hobbies.

× I think I have a vast country with panoramic views, so I'd like to hang out with my friends old cities that I have never been and take great photos of everyone everywhere that I'd like to explore.

✓ I think I have a vast country with panoramic views, so I'd like to visit old cities I have never been to, hang out with my friends, and take great photos as I explore.

Original sentence has several problems: incorrect word order, missing preposition 'to' after 'been', unclear sequence and list items. Reorder into parallel structure 'visit..., hang out..., and take...'. Use 'been to' after 'never been' and clarify 'as I explore' for intended meaning.