Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and singular/plural forms, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific example and a linking word to connect ideas. Pay attention to verb tenses and articles (a/the) and use plural forms where needed.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I particularly enjoy photographing natural landscapes such as mountains, rivers and sunsets because they are visually striking and calm. For example, last month I took a photo of a sunset behind a mountain range that reminded me of my hometown, and I often share my best shots with friends and family to keep those memories alive.

Sugestão: Make your opinion clear in one sentence, then give specific reasons and an example using linking words. Correct grammar and phrasing: avoid awkward constructions and include articles and prepositions. Use descriptive vocabulary relevant to scenery.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and refreshing than busy city scenes. For instance, the green hills and rivers near my village make me feel calm and relaxed, whereas I only enjoy city views at night for their bright lights and skyline.

Sugestão: Answer directly, correct vocabulary and sentence structure, and be specific. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., 'incredible natural ability', 'peaceful blazes') with accurate descriptions. Mention future plans succinctly using correct modal verbs.

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country, Nepal, because it has amazing scenery—from the Himalayan peaks to green hills and tranquil rivers. I haven't traveled abroad yet, but I hope to visit other countries in the future to compare their landscapes with the natural beauty of Nepal.

× As I do, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially the natural landscape like mountain, river and sunset.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural landscapes like mountains, rivers, and sunsets.

Remove the unnecessary 'As I do' and correct noun/adjective forms: 'natural landscape' should be plural 'natural landscapes' when listing examples, and use plural nouns 'mountains, rivers, and sunsets'. Also add commas for list clarity.

× Whenever I visited our new place, I like to capture different beautiful scenery because it helps me remember this moment.

✓ Whenever I visit our new place, I like to capture different beautiful scenery because it helps me remember the moment.

Tense inconsistency: 'Whenever I visited' (past) conflicts with 'I like' (present). Use present 'visit' to match habitual action. Also 'this moment' is better as 'the moment' in this context.

× I also enjoy sharing some of my favorite photo with my friend and family.

✓ I also enjoy sharing some of my favorite photos with my friends and family.

Count noun and article errors: 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match 'some of my favorite'. 'friend and family' should be plural 'friends and family' for natural reference.

× I do say I prefer views in rural areas.

✓ I would say I prefer views in rural areas.

Awkward use of 'I do say'—use 'I would say' to express a preference politely in present context.

× I find that natural scenery more peaceful and relaxing than busy city landscape.

✓ I find that natural scenery is more peaceful and relaxing than the busy city landscape.

Missing verb 'is' required to link subject and adjectives. Also add definite article 'the' before 'busy city landscape' for specificity.

× I especially enjoy seeing Green Hill river and often I feel because the hill may feel calm and refreshed.

✓ I especially enjoy seeing Green Hill River and often feel calm and refreshed because of the hills.

Capitalization and proper noun formatting: 'Green Hill River' should be capitalized. The original had unclear structure; simplify to 'often feel calm and refreshed because of the hills' and remove awkward 'may feel'.

× However, I also appreciate city views at night because of the looks very beautiful.

✓ However, I also appreciate city views at night because they look very beautiful.

Incorrect phrase 'because of the looks very beautiful' is ungrammatical. Use subject 'they' + verb 'look' to describe appearance.

× I prefer using my own country, Nepal.

✓ I prefer my own country, Nepal.

'Prefer using' is unnatural here. Use 'prefer my own country' to express preference.

× Nepal has incredible natural ability for a Himalayan to green hill, river and peaceful blazes.

✓ Nepal has incredible natural beauty, from the Himalayas to green hills, rivers, and peaceful valleys.

Many word choice errors: 'ability' should be 'beauty'; 'a Himalayan' should be 'the Himalayas' or 'the Himalayas to'; 'green hill, river and peaceful blazes' corrected to 'green hills, rivers, and peaceful valleys' for correct nouns and parallel structure.

× I haven't traveled abroad yet, but I have to love my country, see the landscape other countries in the future and compare them with the beauty of Nepal.

✓ I haven't traveled abroad yet, but I would love to see the landscapes of other countries in the future and compare them with the beauty of Nepal.

Incorrect modal and infinitive use: 'I have to love my country' is wrong—use 'I would love' to express desire. Also 'see the landscape other countries' needs 'see the landscapes of other countries'. Ensure future intent with 'would love to see'.