Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, use clearer topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas. Aim for 3–4 concise sentences and correct articles and plurality (e.g., “a big fan of taking pictures of nature, especially mountains and animals”).

Exemplo: Yes — I really enjoy taking photos of different views, especially natural scenes. For example, I often photograph mountain landscapes and wildlife because the light at sunrise creates dramatic colours. I find this hobby relaxing and exciting, and it helps me unwind after a busy day.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and then clarify with specific reasons or a brief comparison using linking words. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., “hotspot city” and “that place” are unclear). Keep to 2–4 well-linked sentences.

Exemplo: I like both urban and rural views, but for different reasons. In cities I enjoy interesting architecture and lively streets, whereas in the countryside I value wide open landscapes and quiet scenery. So it depends on my mood and the kind of photo I want to take.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, correct grammar (e.g., “my country’s views” and avoid “fears”), and give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “many reasons” and unsupported comparative claims. Keep answer concise and precise.

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because they are familiar and unique to me. For example, our mountain ranges and native wildlife are places I know well, and they offer stunning landscapes that I enjoy photographing more than unfamiliar foreign scenes.

× Yes I do. I'm especially big fan of taking picture of nature, especially mountains and the animals.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm especially a big fan of taking pictures of nature, especially mountains and animals.

Missing articles and plural form: 'a big fan' requires the indefinite article a; 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' for general activity; 'the animals' is unnecessary unless referring to specific animals, so use 'animals'. Also add commas for clarity.

× When I take the picture I feel excited and I enjoy this kind of activity as it helps me to relax.

✓ When I take pictures I feel excited, and I enjoy this kind of activity because it helps me relax.

Tense and wording: use plural 'pictures' to match general habit; add comma before conjunction; 'as' can be replaced with 'because' for clarity; 'helps me to relax' is acceptable but 'helps me relax' is more natural.

× I do prefer both urban and rural views. It depends where you are at. Hotspot city or on the great breathtaking countryside that place.

✓ I prefer both urban and rural views. It depends on where you are: a busy city or the breathtaking countryside.

Awkward structure and preposition use: 'I prefer' sounds more natural than 'I do prefer' in this context. Use 'depends on where you are' (correct preposition). The next fragment was a sentence fragment; combine into one sentence with parallel nouns: 'a busy city or the breathtaking countryside.' Remove redundant words like 'that place'.

× It's hard to answer those question.

✓ It's hard to answer that question.

Plural vs singular: 'those' is plural while 'question' is singular. Use 'that question' for a singular noun or 'those questions' if plural.

× However I do prefer my countries views rather than other countries fears because of many reasons.

✓ However, I prefer the views of my country rather than those of other countries for many reasons.

Possessive and noun forms: 'my countries views' lacks possessive punctuation and should be 'the views of my country' or 'my country's views'. 'Other countries fears' is incorrect—probably meant 'those of other countries'. Also use 'for many reasons' not 'because of many reasons'. Add comma after 'However'.

× First of all, I do believe that my country has breathtaking mountains and adorable animals than other.

✓ First of all, I believe that my country has more breathtaking mountains and more adorable animals than others.

Comparison structure: when comparing, use 'more ... than' and a suitable comparison object. 'Than other' is incomplete; use 'than others' or 'than other countries.' 'I do believe' is acceptable but 'I believe' is more natural. Add 'more' to form comparative.