Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct small grammar errors, and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words when adding details (for example, because, so, or as a result).

Exemplo: I love taking photographs; it's my favourite hobby. I often take pictures of everyday moments because they help me remember special times. For example, last week I photographed a sunset at the beach and kept it to remind me of that peaceful evening.

Sugestão: Provide a clear preference with specific reasons, use correct vocabulary (rural, not roller), and link ideas logically. Avoid vague phrases and fillers. Limit to up to 4–5 concise sentences with one or two supporting details or comparisons.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and enjoy open spaces and nature. However, I also appreciate urban scenes for their architecture and busy streets. For instance, rural areas feel calmer and greener, while cities offer interesting buildings and lively markets.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly, use correct grammar and smoother linking phrases (for example, because, however, while). Give one concrete example or contrast to support your preference and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they often have more green spaces and diverse landscapes. For example, when I visited a European city, I was impressed by its parks and tree-lined streets, which are less common in many parts of Saudi Arabia. However, I appreciate some local deserts and historic sites at home.

× Yes, I like it's my favorite hobby by the way I like to take pictures for everything and every moment.

✓ Yes, I like it; it's my favorite hobby. By the way, I like to take pictures of everything and every moment.

The original mixes pronouns and contractions incorrectly ('I like it's' is ungrammatical). Use 'I like it' or 'it's my favorite hobby' as separate clauses. Also use the correct preposition 'of' with 'take pictures of something.' Add punctuation to separate ideas for clarity.

× I enjoyed it umm, even if I don't want to share it just to keep it uh, with me to remember and to have a memory uh credible memory.

✓ I enjoy it, even if I don't want to share the photos and just keep them with me to remember and have a credible memory.

The student used past tense 'enjoyed' while the surrounding context is present habitual preference; use present 'enjoy' to match. Also correct word order and unnecessary fillers; 'credible memory' is awkward — 'a lasting memory' or 'a good memory' is clearer.

× Both actually. Every one of them has his own idea and his culture.

✓ Both actually. Each of them has its own character and culture.

Using 'Every one of them has his' is incorrect because 'his' assumes male gender. Use neutral 'its' for 'each/each one' referring to areas. 'Idea' is vague; 'character' better fits context.

× I would like to prefer the roller areas, maybe uh, because I live in a roller area so I can't see urban areas.

✓ I would prefer rural areas, maybe because I live in a rural area and I don't get to see urban areas often.

'Roller' is a misspelling of 'rural.' Also 'I would like to prefer' is redundant; use 'I would prefer' or 'I prefer.' Improve sentence flow and add 'often' to clarify frequency.

× A lot of uh, in my country.

✓ There are not many urban areas in my country.

Original fragment lacks a verb and subject. Rephrase to a complete sentence using 'there are' to state existence, matching intended meaning that urban areas are scarce.

× I think in another country, because in my country, Saudi Arabia, we don't have a lot of trees, a lot of green areas.

✓ I prefer other countries because in my country, Saudi Arabia, we don't have many trees or green areas.

Use 'prefer' to match question about preference. Replace 'a lot of' with 'many' before countable nouns ('trees') and use parallel structure 'trees or green areas.' Maintain present simple for general truths.

× Maybe in the future we're gonna have, but nowadays we don't have enough of them.

✓ Maybe in the future we'll have more, but at present we don't have enough.

Avoid informal 'gonna' in formal speech; use 'we'll' or 'we will.' 'Enough of them' is awkward; 'enough' or 'enough of those' can be shortened to 'enough.' Use 'at present' for formality and clarity.

× But in outside of my country we have, there is a lot of place, great place, a lot of green, a lot of beautiful and impressive places.

✓ But outside my country there are many great places with lots of greenery; there are many beautiful and impressive sites.

'In outside of' is incorrect; use 'outside my country' or 'outside of my country.' Use plural nouns with 'many' for countable 'places.' Combine and reorder phrases for natural English: 'great places with lots of greenery' and avoid repetition.