Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and filler words, correct grammar (e.g., "it shows" not "it showed"), and give one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing scenery because changing angles can reveal different colors and moods. For example, shooting a sunrise from ground level highlights warm tones, while a higher viewpoint captures the wider landscape.

Sugestão: Provide a clear preference or a balanced comparison with correct grammar and concise linking. Reduce repetition (e.g., "peace and quiet" used twice) and use one linking word to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I like both, but if I had to choose I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and natural. However, urban scenes can be striking too, especially at night when city lights create dramatic contrasts.

Sugestão: Make the answer direct and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Avoid hesitations like "uh" and redundant phrasing.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has stunning coastlines and cinematic landscapes. For instance, I love photographing Ha Long Bay at sunrise, which always makes me proud of the country's natural beauty.

× I mean the beautiful scenery itself, uh, it showed it to be taking pictures of in different angles as it brings out various of five and moods.

✓ I mean the beautiful scenery itself, uh, it shows itself best when you take pictures from different angles because it brings out various sides and moods.

Original uses incorrect verb forms and phrasing: 'showed it to be taking pictures of' is ungrammatical. The main verb should be present 'shows' (present simple) to match the general statement. 'Take pictures from different angles' is the correct verb + prepositional phrase. 'Various of five' is nonsensical; intended 'various sides'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structure (scenery shows), use 'when' + clause for condition, and correct nouns ('sides' and 'moods').

× That depends. I think both the urban areas and the rural ones all have their charm.

✓ That depends. I think both the urban areas and the rural ones have their charms.

Original 'have their charm' is acceptable, but with 'both... and...' referencing two groups it's more natural to pluralize 'charm' to 'charms' or keep singular; choose 'charms' to emphasize multiple attractions. Main agreement is fine, but slight mismatch in number and natural collocation led to ambiguity. Suggestion: use 'have their charms' for parallel plural idea.

× And even though the urban areas is very modern as well as busy with daily life, the rural areas often have that kind of quiet quality that really brings out the peace and quiet.

✓ And even though the urban areas are very modern and busy with daily life, the rural areas often have that quiet quality that brings out a sense of peace.

'Urban areas' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Also avoid redundancy 'quiet quality that really brings out the peace and quiet' — rephrase to 'brings out a sense of peace.' Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and reduce redundant phrasing.

× I think I prefer viewing my own country to looking at all this since Vietnam is very famous for its beautiful coastlines as well as cinematic sceneries.

✓ I think I prefer viewing my own country to looking at others, since Vietnam is very famous for its beautiful coastlines and cinematic scenery.

Original 'looking at all this' is vague; 'looking at others' or 'looking at views in other countries' is clearer. Use parallel gerunds 'viewing' and 'looking' are acceptable, but 'cinematic sceneries' is awkward — 'cinematic scenery' or 'cinematic landscapes' is better. Also 'coastlines and ... scenery' is clearer. Suggestion: maintain parallel gerund forms and use standard collocations ('cinematic scenery').

× Uh, it would be a great way for me to witness it in person as well as feeling proud of my own country.

✓ Uh, it would be a great way for me to witness it in person and feel proud of my country.

Use of 'to witness' followed by 'feeling' creates a mismatch in parallel structure: after 'to' infinitive phrase, use another infinitive ('to feel') or use coordinated base forms. Better: 'to witness it in person and feel proud' or 'to witness it in person and to feel proud.' Suggestion: keep parallel structure for coordinated verbs and avoid unnecessary possessive 'my own country' when 'my country' suffices.