Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, fluency and clarity. Use correct verb forms and articles, avoid hesitation words (uh), and reorganize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Be specific about what attracts you and give a succinct example. Keep answers under 5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take pictures of interesting factories because I like their geometric shapes and textures, and I also photograph magnificent buildings and scenic lakes to capture their atmosphere.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary errors. Replace unclear words (e.g. “bowl wheels”, “hung round employees”) with correct terms like “both” and “being around people.” State a clear preference with reasons using linking words (because, however). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I enjoy views in both urban and rural areas, but if I had to choose I would prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and lively street scenes. However, sometimes I appreciate the tranquility of the countryside when I need peace.

Sugestão: Reduce redundancy and give specific reasons or examples. Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Use connecting words (because, for example) and provide a concrete example of what makes foreign views more interesting (architecture, landscapes, cultural scenes). Keep it concise.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I find the architecture and cultural scenes more varied. For example, I love photographing colorful markets in Morocco or historic temples in Japan because they look and feel very different from places at home.

× Yes, I like take picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

After 'like' to express general preference, use the gerund (verb + -ing). Also use plural 'pictures' when speaking generally about taking multiple photos. Suggestion: 'like taking pictures' is the natural collocation.

× For example, when I just see a factory, I'd like to take a picture of it and the same thing happens, uh, if I just see an image of a magnificent building and a Transco lake.

✓ For example, when I see a factory, I'd like to take a picture of it, and the same happens if I see an image of a magnificent building and a tranquil lake.

Remove unnecessary 'just' which is overused and awkward here; 'the same thing happens' is wordy — 'the same happens' is concise. 'Transco lake' appears to be a typo; 'tranquil lake' fits context. Use simple present 'see' for habitual actions. 'Image of' is odd; keep 'see a magnificent building and a tranquil lake.'

× I like bowl wheels in both areas, but if I just must choose between one of them, I'd prefer urban areas through our rural areas because urban areas are sometimes quite noisy.

✓ I like both views in both areas, but if I had to choose between them, I'd prefer urban areas to rural areas because urban areas are sometimes quite noisy.

Original 'bowl wheels' is incorrect — likely meant 'both' or 'both views'; corrected to 'both views'. 'If I just must choose' is ungrammatical; use conditional 'if I had to choose' or 'if I must choose.' Use 'prefer ... to ...' not 'through.' Use 'between them' rather than 'one of them.'

× Sometimes I do like noises, but not always.

✓ Sometimes I do like noise, but not always.

'Noise' as an uncountable noun fits general situations; 'noises' plural implies discrete sounds. Use 'noise' to mean background sound. 'I do like' is acceptable for emphasis, keep it if desired.

× I just like to be hung round employees where there are more people.

✓ I just like to be around people where there are more people.

'Be hung round employees' is incorrect: 'hung round' is informal and usually means loitering; 'employees' is inappropriate here. Use 'be around people' to express enjoying being among more people. Maintain simple present preference.

× Actually, I really prefer views in other countries over my own country, because the views from other countries are always more interesting than in my own country.

✓ Actually, I really prefer views in other countries to those in my own country, because the views abroad are usually more interesting than those at home.

Use 'prefer A to B' structure. Avoid repeating 'my own country' twice; use 'those' to refer to 'views.' 'Always' is too strong generalization; 'usually' or 'often' is better. 'From other countries' -> 'abroad' or 'in other countries'.

× I like different cultures and food and so on.

✓ I like different cultures, foods, and so on.

List nouns should be parallel and plural where appropriate: 'different cultures' and 'foods' (or 'different kinds of food'). 'And so on' is acceptable but place after a proper parallel list. Suggest: 'I like different cultures and foods.'