Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is positive and relevant, but it is disfluent and incomplete in places. To improve, make your response more coherent by using a clear topic sentence, linking phrases, and complete sentences. Avoid pauses and unfinished thoughts. Add a specific detail or example about the park (what made it memorable) and keep the answer within 3–4 complete sentences. Use linking words like “for example” or “because” to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me remember places I visit. For example, on a recent work trip to Malaysia I photographed a park with a beautiful lake and colourful tropical plants, which made the scene very memorable.

Sugestão: Your answer compares urban and rural views and gives a reason, which is good. Improve by making the contrast clearer with linking words (“however” is fine) and finish your final thought. Provide a specific example describing what you like in rural views (e.g., mountains, fields, quiet streams). Keep the response concise (2–4 sentences) and avoid repeating words like “areas.”

Exemplo: I enjoy living in urban areas because everything is accessible, but I prefer the views in rural areas for their greenery and tranquility. For example, I love looking at wide fields and quiet streams when I visit the countryside because they feel peaceful and refreshing.

Sugestão: Your answer states a clear preference and gives a personal detail, which is effective. Improve fluency by simplifying phrasing (e.g., avoid “having to visit”), finishing ideas, and adding one concrete reason why you want to see views abroad (e.g., different landscapes, cultural scenes, winter scenery in Finland). Use linking words such as “because” to connect your reason.

Exemplo: Although I appreciate scenery at home, I prefer visiting other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I have always wanted to visit Finland in December to see the snowy forests and the Northern Lights.

× We visited this park in. The.

✓ We visited this park.

The original has fragments 'in.' and 'The.' creating an incomplete sentence. Remove the stray fragments to form a complete sentence: 'We visited this park.' If you meant to add a location or time, include a prepositional phrase (for example, 'We visited this park in Kuala Lumpur' or 'We visited this park in the morning'). Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb and complete complements.

× I love living in the urban areas due to accessibility of different places.

✓ I love living in urban areas because of the accessibility of different places.

Use 'in urban areas' without the definite article when speaking generally. 'Due to' is typically followed by a noun phrase; 'because of' is more natural here. Also include 'the' before 'accessibility' to specify that accessibility is the reason. Suggestion: 'I love living in urban areas because of the accessibility of different places.'

× However, I prefer views from the rural area especially with the greeneries.

✓ However, I prefer views from rural areas, especially with the greenery.

'the rural area' is singular and sounds like a specific area; use the plural 'rural areas' to speak generally. 'Greeneries' is not commonly used in English; use the uncountable noun 'greenery'. Add a comma before 'especially' for clarity.

× The nature vibe, the.

✓ I enjoy the natural vibe.

Original is a fragment with repeated 'the.' Convert to a full sentence: subject plus verb and object. 'Natural vibe' is more idiomatic than 'nature vibe.' Alternatively: 'I enjoy the natural atmosphere.' Ensure sentences are complete.

× As much as I prefer views in my own country, I would say I prefer having to visit other countries, especially in Europe.

✓ Although I like views in my own country, I would say I prefer visiting other countries, especially in Europe.

'As much as' is awkward here; 'Although' or 'While' is preferable. 'Prefer having to visit' is ungrammatical—use 'prefer visiting' or 'prefer to visit.' The present tense 'prefer visiting' matches a general preference. Keep structure parallel: 'Although I like..., I prefer visiting...'.

× It's always been a lifelong dream to go to Finland, especially during December. I wish to visit.

✓ It has always been my lifelong dream to go to Finland, especially in December. I hope to visit one day.

'It's always been a lifelong dream' is acceptable but 'It has always been my lifelong dream' is clearer. Use 'in December' instead of 'during December.' 'I wish to visit' is grammatically correct but 'I hope to visit one day' sounds more natural and expresses future intention. Ensure tense and modality match the intended meaning.