Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, I often go hiking with friends, and I photograph landscapes and interesting scenes along the trail to capture the atmosphere and lighting.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar: begin with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking word to give specific reasons. Use more natural phrases and avoid awkward wording like 'Where are' and 'numerous picturesque things.'

Exemplo: I definitely prefer rural views because of the wide-open landscapes and natural scenery. For example, when I go hiking with friends we enjoy rolling hills, forests and quiet lakes, which help us relax and take great photos.

Sugestão: Use correct collocations and be specific. Replace 'using my own country' with 'my own country' and avoid vague phrases like 'picturesque things.' Offer a clear reason and one concrete example with accurate description.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I know the culture and landscapes better. For example, standing on the Great Wall near Beijing offers sweeping views of the surrounding mountains and city, which is both impressive and peaceful.

× Yes, of course, I'm really into taking pictures of this various and various views, especially when I'm out hunting out with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course, I'm really into taking pictures of various views, especially when I'm out hanging out with my friends.

Original contains incorrect word choice and redundant phrase: 'this various and various views' is ungrammatical and redundant; 'hunting out' is wrong for casual social context. Use 'various views' (correct plural adjective use) and 'hanging out' to mean spending time with friends. Keep present continuous 'I'm really into' which fits the context.

× Uh, for instance, I always try to go hiking and I will takes pictures of the views and the scene along the way.

✓ For instance, I always try to go hiking and I take pictures of the views and the scenery along the way.

The verb 'takes' is incorrect for the subject 'I' (third person singular required only for he/she/it). Use simple present 'I take' to show habitual action. 'Scene' is better as 'scenery' to refer to landscape. Also remove filler 'Uh' and align tense with 'always' indicating habitual action.

× Where are the definitely preferred views in rural areas because there are numerous picturesque things and wide open landscapes.

✓ I definitely prefer views in rural areas because there are many picturesque sights and wide-open landscapes.

Sentence began with 'Where are the definitely preferred views' which misuses 'where' and passive structure. Replace with 'I definitely prefer' to state preference. 'Numerous picturesque things' is awkward; use 'many picturesque sights'. Add hyphen in 'wide-open' as compound adjective before noun.

× For instance, I often go hiking with my friends and we can enjoy rolling hills, forests and quiet lakes, which is relaxing.

✓ For instance, I often go hiking with my friends and we can enjoy rolling hills, forests, and quiet lakes, which are relaxing.

Relative clause 'which is relaxing' refers to plural noun phrase 'rolling hills, forests, and quiet lakes' so verb must be plural 'are'. Also add comma before 'and' in list (Oxford comma optional) and maintain present plural agreement.

× Well, of course I prefer using my own country.

✓ Well, of course I prefer my own country.

'Prefer using my own country' incorrectly uses 'using' with 'prefer'. Say 'I prefer my own country' or 'I prefer to stay in my own country.' Keep simple present 'prefer' for general preference.

× China has a lot of picturesque things to see in person.

✓ China has many picturesque places to see in person.

'Picturesque things' is vague; 'places' is more natural. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for a slightly more formal register. 'To see in person' is acceptable to emphasize physical visit.

× For instance, you can step onto the Great Wall to see the whole city and the whole Beijing city.

✓ For instance, you can walk on the Great Wall to see the whole city of Beijing.

Use 'walk on' or 'walk along' rather than 'step onto' for the Great Wall. 'The whole Beijing city' is redundant; use 'the city of Beijing' or simply 'Beijing'. Also 'walk along the Great Wall' emphasizes movement and viewing.

× It's quite relaxing and enormous.

✓ It's quite relaxing and impressive.

'Enormous' describes size but sounds odd referring to an experience; 'impressive' better conveys awe when viewing a large historic structure. Maintain adjective parallelism describing the experience.