Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Correct grammar (verb forms and articles), shorten repetition, and make the answer more natural. Use one clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. For example, change “I also sharing a photo on social platform to share my experience to travel” to a concise sentence about posting highlights. Keep answers to under five sentences and use linking words (so, because, and) correctly.

Exemplo: I enjoy taking photos when I travel or hang out with friends because they help me preserve memories. I usually post a few highlights on social media so my family and friends can see what I experienced.

Sugestão: Clarify your preference directly with a topic sentence, correct articles and verb forms, and add a specific supporting detail or brief comparison. Use linking words (although, however, because) to show contrast between past and present preferences. Also vary vocabulary to show range (vibrant, peaceful, tranquil, bustling).

Exemplo: I now prefer rural views because the countryside is peaceful and the air is much fresher. Although I used to enjoy the city’s vibrant atmosphere and tall buildings, I now like walking by rice fields and listening to birds when I travel home.

Sugestão: Fix grammar (tense, articles, and sentence structure) and make the response more coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use correct tense: present for general preferences, and past simple or present perfect for past experiences. Avoid vague phrases like “travel a lot of space.”

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has many amazing landscapes. Growing up and traveling around the country made me appreciate my hometown’s scenery, so I want to explore more of its mountains and coastline.

× I also sharing a photo on social platform to share my experience to travel.

✓ I also share photos on social platforms to share my travel experiences.

The original uses 'sharing' without an auxiliary verb, which is incorrect. Use the base verb 'share' to match the present simple tense used earlier ('I love taking photos'). Also change singular 'a photo' to plural 'photos' and 'social platform' to 'social platforms' for natural generalization; 'experience to travel' is awkward, so use 'travel experiences'.

× I prefer the view of my country because Vietnam had lot of amazing landscape.

✓ I prefer the views of my country because Vietnam has a lot of amazing landscapes.

Errors include article/quantifier and verb tense. 'Had lot of' should be 'has a lot of' to use present simple for a general fact. Add the article 'a' before 'lot' and pluralize 'landscape' to 'landscapes'. Also 'view'→'views' is more natural when speaking generally.

× When I grew up and travel a lot of space.

✓ As I grew up and travelled, I travelled to many places.

The original is ungrammatical: 'grew up and travel a lot of space' mixes tenses and uses 'space' incorrectly. Use past tense 'grew up' with past 'travelled' or 'traveled' (choose consistent spelling) and replace 'space' with 'places' to convey visiting many locations. Maintain parallel past tense.

× I realized my hometown is so beautiful and I want to explore more.

✓ I realized my hometown was so beautiful and I wanted to explore it more.

The sentence mixes past ('realized') with present ('is', 'want'). For a past narrative, backshift the present verbs to past: 'was' and 'wanted'. If you prefer to state a current feeling, keep 'realized' then use present for ongoing intent, but for sequence clarity use consistent tense.