Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., tense and countable nouns) and reduce hesitations.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I have been interested in photography since middle school, and I often take photos to capture the atmosphere and beauty of nature. For example, I recently photographed a sunset over a lake to remember the peaceful moment.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer then support it with clear, specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and repeated words. Use linking words (e.g., because, so, for example) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'peacefulness' instead of 'breath of the name').

Exemplo: I prefer rural views. Because rural areas are quieter and more natural, I can relax and notice small details like birds and wildflowers. For example, last month I photographed a quiet village at dawn and loved the peaceful atmosphere.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid unclear comparisons. Use specific examples and correct geographic references. Reduce fillers and repeated words; provide a short reason and one example of another country you admire.

Exemplo: I like views in my own country because it has unique desert landscapes and rich natural beauty. However, I also admire other countries like Switzerland for their dramatic mountains and lakes. For instance, I would love to photograph the Swiss Alps because of their stunning scenery.

× Well, actually I do because taking picture, it was my hobby since I was in the middle school.

✓ Well, actually I do because taking pictures was my hobby since I was in middle school.

The phrase 'taking picture' needs the gerund with plural 'pictures' to match general activity. Also 'it was' is unnecessary and 'the middle school' should be 'middle school' for general reference. Use the gerund phrase 'taking pictures' as subject and keep past tense 'was' to match 'since I was in middle school'. Suggestion: Use 'taking pictures was my hobby since I was in middle school.'

× So sometimes I like to, to enjoy the vibe of the view and the beautiful and the beauty of the nature.

✓ Sometimes I like to enjoy the vibe of a view and the beauty of nature.

Redundant words 'the beautiful and the beauty' and incorrect article usage 'the nature'. Use 'a view' for a general instance and 'the beauty of nature' or simply 'beauty of nature'. Remove repeated 'to'. Suggestion: Simplify to 'I like to enjoy the vibe of a view and the beauty of nature.'

× So I took this, I, I took a photo or a picture to, to memorize that.

✓ So I took a photo to remember it.

Awkward repetition and incorrect verb 'memorize' for recalling a scene. Use 'remember' and eliminate repeated words. 'A photo' is sufficient; 'to remember it' clearly states purpose. Suggestion: Say 'I took a photo to remember it.'

× Well, urban areas are so overrated, but so my biggest interest on the rural, rural areas, of course, because you, you can feel the, the nature, the eternity of the nature and also you will, you will feel the breath of the, the name.

✓ Well, urban areas are overrated, but my biggest interest is in rural areas, of course, because you can feel nature, its permanence, and even the fresh air.

Incorrect phrase 'my biggest interest on the rural' should be 'my biggest interest is in rural areas' (subject-verb agreement and preposition). Repetition and unclear phrases like 'eternity of the nature' and 'breath of the name' are unclear; replace with 'its permanence' and 'fresh air' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: 'My biggest interest is in rural areas because you can feel nature and the fresh air.'

× Well, actually my country is our country, of course, is known as, uh, as the, the most, uh, beautiful country, uh, in the, in the Sahara and the beauty of, uh, and the, and the nature.

✓ Well, my country is, of course, known as one of the most beautiful countries in the Sahara because of its natural beauty.

Redundant and disfluent phrasing 'my country is our country' and repeated 'is'. Use 'one of the most beautiful countries' for accuracy and plural agreement. 'In the Sahara' needs clear relation and 'the beauty of and the nature' should be 'natural beauty'. Suggestion: 'My country is, of course, known as one of the most beautiful countries in the Sahara because of its natural beauty.'

× But uh, you should see another country is such as, uh, uh, Switzerland, Switzerland, like.

✓ But you should also see other countries, such as Switzerland.

Awkward structure 'you should see another country is such as' is incorrect English. Use 'other countries, such as Switzerland.' Remove repetition and filler words. Suggestion: 'But you should also see other countries, such as Switzerland.'