Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and correct small lexical errors; give a clear topic sentence followed by one specific supporting detail. Keep answer to within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler sounds (umm, uh). Also correct 'tray' to 'train' or 'bus' if that was intended. Use a linking phrase when adding detail (for example, 'for example' or 'because').

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by car or train because the scenery helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching trees and small villages pass by, which makes the journey feel calm. This quiet time also gives me a chance to think about my plans for the day.

Sugestão: Complete the sentence and provide a concrete reason or example. Avoid trailing off and unnecessary repetition. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'so' to connect reason and result, and be specific about what you find amazing (colors, landscapes, architecture).

Exemplo: Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery from the car or train because the landscapes change quickly and I want to remember them. For instance, I often capture colorful fields and old houses that look beautiful in the late afternoon light.

Sugestão: Organize the answer into a clear comparison with linking words (e.g., 'on the one hand... on the other hand'). Avoid sentence fragments and keep sentences connected. Provide a brief personal preference at the end to conclude.

Exemplo: On the one hand, I like the mountains because they are high and offer great hiking opportunities which are good exercise. On the other hand, the sea is more peaceful and relaxing, especially when I want to rest. Overall, I prefer the mountains because I enjoy active outdoor activities like hiking.

× Yes, I enjoy watching the scenery outside the window of the car or tray because, umm, the atmosphere is uh, peaceful and uh, MMM, I can relax.

✓ Yes, I enjoy watching the scenery outside the window of the car or train because the atmosphere is peaceful and I can relax.

Errors: 'tray' is a wrong word choice (should be 'train'); the phrase 'the atmosphere is uh, peaceful' has unnecessary fillers and missing article handling; remove fillers and ensure parallel structure. Suggestion: Replace incorrect noun, remove filled hesitations, use 'the atmosphere is peaceful' and join clauses with 'and' to make a complete sentence. (Grammar problem mapped to ID 22 Article errors and word choice.)

× Yes, actually I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car or train when traveling and because they are amazing and the.

✓ Yes, actually I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car or train when traveling because it is amazing.

Errors: sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete ('and because they are amazing and the.'). Remove redundant conjunctions and finish the thought. Use singular 'it' or 'they' consistently; here 'scenery' is uncountable so use 'it is amazing'. Suggestion: Delete extraneous 'and' and choose correct pronoun for 'scenery'. (Grammar problem mapped to ID 26 Sentence structure errors and ID 22 Article/word usage.)

× I think mountains are really high and I enjoy hiking. It is a great opportunity. To exercise, however, looking at the sea is more peaceful and relaxing.

✓ I think mountains are really high and I enjoy hiking; it is a great opportunity to exercise. However, looking at the sea is more peaceful and relaxing.

Errors: Fragmentation and poor punctuation: 'It is a great opportunity. To exercise,' creates a sentence fragment. Combine into one sentence with correct punctuation and move 'however' to the start of the contrasting clause. Suggestion: Use a semicolon or combine clauses to avoid fragments and place transition words correctly. (Grammar problem mapped to ID 26 Sentence structure errors.)