Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use precise vocabulary. Correct subject-verb agreement and simplify phrases (e.g., “different shades of orange” instead of “all grades of all orange colors”). Limit answer to 2–3 sentences and add a brief supporting detail with a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car. For example, I especially enjoy sunsets because they display different shades of orange and are often mesmerizing to watch.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and overly long explanations. Use clear linking words (e.g., “but” or “however”) and correct small errors (remove duplicate words and reduce religious expressions unless relevant). Keep to 2–3 sentences, give a specific example of when you photograph and when you don’t.

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes take photos of scenes outside the car, but I usually only snap a quick picture if it looks especially striking. Otherwise, I prefer to enjoy the moment and soak in the view.

Sugestão: Provide a clear preference or a concise explanation of why you like both, fix grammar (subject-verb agreement and word forms), and avoid filler words like “umm.” Use linking words to compare (e.g., “whereas” or “while”) and give one specific detail or example for each.

Exemplo: I enjoy both, but if I had to choose I prefer the sea because its calmness and fresh air help me relax. Whereas the mountains feel strong and contemplative, making them better for peaceful hikes.

× Yes, I do tend to look out at the scenery while I'm driving.

✓ Yes, I tend to look out at the scenery while I am travelling.

The original mixes 'do tend to' (unnecessary auxiliary) and 'driving' which conflicts with the question about travelling by bus or car. Use simple present 'tend to' for habitual action and 'travelling' to match the context; avoid redundant auxiliary 'do' unless emphasizing.

× Especially sunset really captivate my attention because it's full of all grades of all orange colors, and it's often mesmerizing and beautiful to watch.

✓ Especially the sunset really captivates my attention because it is full of many shades of orange, and it is often mesmerizing and beautiful to watch.

Missing definite article before 'sunset' and subject-verb disagreement: 'sunset' requires singular verb 'captivates'. 'All grades of all orange colors' is incorrect phrasing; use 'many shades of orange'. Avoid contractions in formal correction and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I take photos whenever I come across a beautiful scenario while I'm driving.

✓ Yes, I take photos whenever I come across a beautiful scene while I am travelling.

'Scenario' is incorrect word choice for scenery outside a window; 'scene' is more natural. Change 'driving' to 'travelling' to match the examiner's question. Present simple 'take' and 'come across' are fine for habitual actions.

× However, I don't I don't love to take a lot of time capturing the scene because I do love to enjoy the scene myself, to soak in the moment and to really feel calm and and appreciate the blessing and the scene that God has blessed us with.

✓ However, I don't like to spend a lot of time taking photos because I prefer to enjoy the view, soak in the moment, feel calm, and appreciate the blessing that God has given us.

Repeated fragments ('I don't I don't', 'and and') and awkward verbs ('love to take a lot of time capturing') create poor sentence structure. Use 'don't like to spend time' and parallel verb forms ('enjoy, soak, feel, appreciate'). Also use 'given us' instead of 'has blessed us with' for concision and correctness.

× I like both of them, either the mountains or the sea.

✓ I like both, the mountains and the sea.

'Either' suggests a choice between two options and conflicts with 'both'. Use either 'I like both' or 'I like either the mountains or the sea' but not both together. Also 'both of them' is unnecessary when naming both.

× Both reflects different energy, different vibes, mountain really reflective strengths and deepness.

✓ Both reflect different energies and vibes; the mountains really reflect strength and depth.

Subject 'Both' (plural) requires plural verb 'reflect'. Use plural nouns 'energies' and avoid uncountable/awkward nouns like 'deepness' in favor of 'depth'. Ensure consistent number agreement and article use ('the mountains').

× However, the sea really reflects calmness, freshness and also a sense of depth.

✓ The sea reflects calmness, freshness, and a sense of depth.

Original is mostly correct but 'really' is unnecessary and informal. Removing it makes the sentence clearer and more natural. Maintain parallel nouns in the list.

× So both really have umm an impact on me and my mental state whenever I stay.

✓ So both have an impact on me and my mental state whenever I am there.

'Umm' is a filler and should be omitted in corrected speech. 'Whenever I stay' is awkward; use 'when I am there' to indicate presence. Keep verb tense present simple for habitual effects.