Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh) and correct tense and article errors (e.g., “the scenery,” “interested in”). Use a linking phrase to make the reason clear.

Exemplo: I usually don’t look out the window when travelling by bus or car because I get motion sickness. For example, I feel dizzy after a short time in a moving vehicle, so I prefer to read or close my eyes until we arrive.

Sugestão: Answer directly and organize ideas: a topic sentence, then a clear reason and a brief example. Correct grammar (e.g., “motion sickness,” “see the scenery,” word order). Replace vague phrases with specific ones and use a linking word to connect the reason and consequence.

Exemplo: No, I rarely take photos from a moving car because I usually feel motion sickness. Instead, I take pictures after we arrive at a place, for instance, when we stop at a viewpoint or reach a hotel, so the photos are steadier and clearer.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., “born,” “these kinds of landscapes,” “spectacular mountains”) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (because, since, for example) to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I grew up in a mountainous province and feel very comfortable there. For example, I love hiking through valleys and forests and enjoying wide views of green slopes and clear streams.

× Well, to be honest, I often get dizzy while traveling, uh, in a metal box, like in a bus or in a car.

✓ Well, to be honest, I often get dizzy while traveling in a metal box, like on a bus or in a car.

Use of prepositions with modes of transport: say 'on a bus' and 'in a car' is acceptable but 'in a bus' is less natural; remove extra commas. This fits question context and maintains present habitual tense. Suggestion: use 'on a bus' and avoid unnecessary commas.

× Uh, that's why I don't often look out the windows to look at the sceneries, although I particularly interested in looking at those sites.

✓ Uh, that's why I don't often look out of the windows to look at the scenery, although I am particularly interested in looking at those sites.

Use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun, not 'sceneries'. Missing verb 'am' after 'particularly' creates sentence fragment. Also 'look out of the windows' is more natural. Suggestion: use uncountable form 'scenery' and include the correct form of 'to be' ('am').

× As I said earlier, I don't often look out the window to a see the size and the scenic landscapes no matter how.

✓ As I said earlier, I don't often look out of the window to see the scenery and scenic landscapes, no matter what.

Remove extraneous 'a' before 'see'. Use 'scenery' (uncountable) and optionally 'scenic landscapes' without 'the' unless referring to specific ones. 'No matter how' is incorrect here; use 'no matter what'. Suggestion: eliminate the extra article and choose correct fixed phrase.

× However, they are beautiful.

✓ However, they are beautiful.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It refers to scenery ('they' could be 'the views') and is acceptable. Suggestion: optionally clarify referent: 'However, the views are beautiful.'

× Also, I often choose to take photos when I get to the destination.

✓ Also, I often choose to take photos when I get to the destination.

This sentence is acceptable. 'Get to the destination' is grammatical. Suggestion: you can say 'when I arrive at my destination' for a more natural phrasing.

× I don't really like the idea of being suffering from sickness motion.

✓ I don't really like the idea of suffering from motion sickness.

Incorrect word order 'being suffering' is ungrammatical; use 'suffering' alone. Also the noun order is 'motion sickness', not 'sickness motion'. Suggestion: use the fixed term 'motion sickness' and simple verb form 'suffering from'.

× Well, I think that I'm more into the scenic landscapes in the mountainous areas since I've born in a mountainous province I've been used to.

✓ Well, I think that I'm more into scenic landscapes in mountainous areas since I was born in a mountainous province and have been used to them.

Incorrect past participle 'born' used with 'I've born' is wrong; use passive 'I was born' for birth. Also sentence run-on: needs conjunction and correct tense 'have been used to them' to indicate familiarity. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses: 'since I was born in a mountainous province, I have been used to them.'

× But these kind of landscapes, I love to see a spectacular mountains with valleys and forests, green trees all around.

✓ But this kind of landscape, I love to see spectacular mountains with valleys and forests and green trees all around.

'These kind of' is incorrect; use 'this kind of' with singular 'kind' or 'these kinds of' with plural. Also 'a spectacular mountains' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' before 'spectacular mountains' or change to 'a spectacular mountain'. Suggestion: match number between determiner and noun and keep consistent singular/plural forms.