Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid phrases like "I don't do travel that much" which are vague; instead say how often you travel and what you enjoy. Use a linking word such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel because I enjoy observing new places. For example, on short trips I like watching city streets and people, while on longer journeys I focus on landscapes and architecture.

Sugestão: Remove filler words and start directly. Use a clear conditional structure and a brief reason or example. Replace awkward phrases like "such as outstanding scenery" with more natural expressions, and avoid starting with "And".

Exemplo: It depends — if something catches my eye, I usually take a photo because I want to remember it. For instance, I often photograph unusual buildings or dramatic sunsets seen from the road.

Sugestão: Provide a clear preference in the topic sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons linked with connectors like "however" or "so". Avoid hesitant starters like "I don't know"; they reduce confidence. Keep to maximum five sentences and make reasons vivid and relevant.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea overall because I find it more relaxing and there are fewer insects. However, I also enjoy the mountains for hiking and fresh air, so I often choose the coast for summer holidays and the mountains for short trips.

× I don't do travel that much, but when I travel I like looking at the scenery because I like relishing the moments.

✓ I don't travel that much, but when I travel I like looking at the scenery because I like relishing the moments.

The phrase 'do travel' is unnecessary and unidiomatic in this context. Use the simple verb 'travel' to form the negative 'I don't travel' in the present tense. This fixes sentence naturalness while keeping the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use 'I don't travel' for habitual present negative; avoid inserting 'do' before base verbs unless forming emphasis or questions.

× And it depends, if something caught my eyes like such as outstanding scenery, then I'll probably take a picture of it.

✓ It depends; if something catches my eye, such as outstanding scenery, then I'll probably take a picture of it.

There are several issues: 'And' at the start is informal and unnecessary; 'it depends' is sufficient. 'Caught' is past tense but the condition refers to a general possibility, so present simple 'catches' is correct. 'My eyes' should be singular 'my eye' in the idiom 'catches my eye.' Also 'like such as' is redundant; use one: 'such as' or 'like.' Suggestions: Use present simple in conditional clauses about general possibilities, use the idiomatic singular 'catch my eye,' and avoid redundant phrases.

× I don't know, I think I like both. I like mountains, but in the summer too many mosquitoes are there, so I might choose sea instead of mountains.

✓ I don't know. I think I like both. I like mountains, but in the summer there are too many mosquitoes, so I might choose the sea instead of the mountains.

Word order and article use need correction. 'Too many mosquitoes are there' is an unnatural word order in English; place the verb after 'there' as 'there are too many mosquitoes.' Also add the definite article 'the' before 'sea' and 'mountains' when referring to them as specific choices: 'the sea' and 'the mountains.' Suggestions: Use natural existential structure 'there are' for stating existence and include 'the' when referring to a specific noun in a contrastive choice.

× I feel relaxed in the sea.

✓ I feel relaxed at the sea.

Preposition choice affects meaning. 'Relaxed in the sea' suggests being physically in the water; if the speaker means by the seaside or at the beach, 'at the sea' or 'by the sea' is more natural. If they do mean being in the water, 'in the sea' is acceptable. Suggestion: Choose 'at/by the sea' to express relaxation while near the sea; use 'in the sea' only if referring to being in the water.