Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar errors, avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “watch my watching the phone make me feel taxi”), and use one or two supporting details linked with a simple connector. Keep to no more than five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy seeing different parts of the city. For example, I like watching old buildings and busy streets, which helps me relax after a long day.

Sugestão: Good content and clear reason. Improve by avoiding repetition, using more varied vocabulary, and adding a specific example with a linking word. Also keep sentences compact and correct small grammar issues (e.g. “capturing them by phone as a photo” → “capturing them on my phone”).

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because they help me keep memories of interesting places. For instance, last month I photographed a dramatic sunset over the highway, which now reminds me of that trip.

Sugestão: Answer directly and fix pronoun and repetition errors. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your choice (e.g. “I prefer the sea”), then give two concise, specific reasons linked with connectors (because, and, for example). Avoid repeating words and stray phrases.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because the blue water and gentle waves calm me down. For example, when I sit by the shore and listen to the waves while playing soft music, I feel relaxed and refreshed.

× Yes, I will look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by bus.

✓ Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus.

The question asks about a habitual action, not a specific future event. Using the simple present tense is correct for habitual routines. Change 'will look' and 'I'm traveling' to 'look' and 'travel' to match habitual present usage. Use: simple present for routines (I look, I travel).

× People love to watch their phone during travelling but I think watch my watching the phone make me feel taxi.

✓ People like to look at their phones while traveling, but I think watching my phone makes me feel tired/uncomfortable.

Multiple errors: pronoun and verb use and word choice. 'Watch their phone' is better as 'look at their phones'. 'During travelling' should be 'while traveling'. 'Watch my watching the phone make me feel taxi' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'watching my phone makes me feel tired' or 'uncomfortable'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'watching... makes'. Replace 'taxi' (wrong word) with appropriate adjective. Suggestion: choose the intended feeling and use correct subject-verb agreement and preposition. Use: 'while' for concurrent actions, 'look at' for focusing on phones, 'makes' for singular gerund subject.

× So I love to look out the window to see different views of the city and that make me feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ So I love to look out the window to see different views of the city, and that makes me feel relaxed and comfortable.

The pronoun 'that' is singular and requires the singular verb 'makes', not 'make'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Ensure subject-verb agreement: singular subject → singular verb.

× I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think capturing them by phone as a photo can allow me to save the memories and the beautiful view forever.

✓ I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think capturing them on my phone allows me to save the memories and the beautiful views forever.

Use simple present for habitual actions and correct verb forms. 'Capturing them by phone as a photo' is awkward; use 'on my phone'. 'Can allow me to save' is wordy; 'allows me to save' is clearer. Also pluralize 'views' to match context.

× I always take photos of the beautiful skies.

✓ I always take photos of beautiful skies.

No article needed before 'beautiful skies' when speaking generally. Simple present is correct for habitual action. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural when referring to skies in general.

× I prefer to see him more than the mountains because when I I think the blue colours of the sea make people feel more calm and also the movements of the water along the sea make me feel refreshed.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because I think the blue color of the sea makes people feel calmer, and the movement of the water makes me feel refreshed.

Several issues: 'prefer to see him' is wrong pronoun and verb; use 'prefer the sea to the mountains' for preference structure. Remove duplicated 'I'. 'Blue colours' -> 'blue color' (or 'blue colours' acceptable), use singular or plural consistently. Subject-verb agreement: 'the blue color... makes', 'the movement... makes'. Use comparative adverb 'calmer' not 'more calm'. 'Along the sea' is awkward; use 'of the water' or simply 'movement of the water'. Adjust word order and articles for natural English.

× I love to listen to music along the seaside and also look at the view at the same time.

✓ I love listening to music by the seaside and looking at the view at the same time.

Use parallel -ing forms for coordinated activities: 'listening... and looking...'. 'Along the seaside' is less natural than 'by the seaside'. Using gerunds here sounds more natural for hobbies: 'love listening' instead of 'love to listen' when paired with another -ing verb.