Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common mistakes (e.g. 'people face' → 'other people's faces', 'I rather' → 'I prefer', 'our listening to you' → remove).

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because it helps me relax. For example, I put on my earphones and watch trees and buildings pass by, which calms me and helps me forget the noise inside the vehicle.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then a specific detail and a reason. Fix grammar (e.g. 'around my phone' → 'my phone is full of photos', 'capture detail lenses' → 'capture details with my lens', 'it make' → 'they make'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of scenery, especially green landscapes. For example, my phone is full of pictures of forests and hills because capturing small details with my camera helps me relax and express my creativity.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference sentence, then one clear reason with correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid awkward words ('hydrophobia' is OK but explain simply; 'ample of water' → 'large bodies of water'). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' and provide a concise supporting detail.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I am afraid of large bodies of water. Also, I enjoy the greenery and fresh air in hilly areas, which makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

× Yes, I often look outside the window while traveling because it feels comfortable looking outside rather than looking here and there in the people face.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window while traveling because it feels more comfortable to look outside rather than at people’s faces.

Incorrect use of prepositions and gerund/infinitive forms: 'look outside the window' -> 'look out of the window' or 'look outside' is preferred; 'looking here and there in the people face' is ungrammatical. Use 'to look' for contrast (infinitive) and 'people’s faces' for possessive plural noun. Advice: use 'look out of the window' or 'look outside' and 'at people’s faces', and choose 'to look' when contrasting actions.

× I rather put my earphones on and then look out of the window.

✓ I prefer to put my earphones on and then look out of the window.

Wrong verb choice: 'I rather' is not correct in this context; use 'I prefer to' or 'I'd rather' followed by a base verb. Advice: use 'I prefer to' + verb or 'I'd rather' + base verb (I'd rather put my earphones on).

× That gives me calmness.

✓ That makes me feel calm.

Awkward noun choice and verb collocation: 'gives me calmness' is technically understandable but unnatural. Use 'makes me feel calm' or 'gives me a sense of calm'. Advice: prefer common collocations like 'feel calm' or 'feel relaxed'.

× Exploring the nature of our listening to you soothing music.

✓ I enjoy listening to soothing music and watching the scenery.

Fragment and incorrect structure: the original is a sentence fragment and unclear. 'Exploring the nature of our listening to you soothing music' has wrong word order and pronouns. Advice: make a complete sentence with subject and verb; use 'I enjoy listening to soothing music' and connect ideas with 'and'.

× Yes, I love greenery and the nature around my phone is filled with photographs of natural scenery, landscapes.

✓ Yes, I love greenery and nature; my phone is filled with photographs of natural scenery and landscapes.

Article and word order: 'the nature' is unnecessary; 'the nature around my phone' is illogical. Also punctuation needed between clauses. Advice: remove 'the' before 'nature' and separate clauses: 'nature; my phone...'.

× I like to capture detail lenses, it make me feel relaxed and helps me to show my creativity.

✓ I like to capture details with my lens; it makes me feel relaxed and helps me show my creativity.

Wrong noun form and verb agreement: 'detail lenses' should be 'details with my lens' or 'detailed shots'; 'it make' should be 'it makes' for subject-verb agreement. Also use semicolon or separate sentences. Advice: use plural 'details' or 'detailed shots' and ensure verbs agree with singular subject 'it'.

× I am a mountain person, I prefer hilly areas over the sea because I have a hydrophobia so I don't go near ample of water.

✓ I am a mountain person; I prefer hilly areas to the sea because I have hydrophobia, so I don't go near large bodies of water.

Wrong preposition and article use and word choice: 'prefer hilly areas over the sea' is acceptable but 'prefer...to the sea' is more natural; 'a hydrophobia' should be 'hydrophobia' without article; 'ample of water' is ungrammatical — use 'large bodies of water'. Advice: drop the article before uncountable illness names and use correct noun phrases for water.

× Whereas hilly areas are more greenery and I love green tree.

✓ Hilly areas are greener, and I love green trees.

Incorrect word forms and agreement: 'more greenery' is wrong comparison; use 'greener' or 'have more greenery'; 'green tree' should be plural 'green trees'. Advice: use comparative adjective 'greener' or noun phrase 'have more greenery' and pluralize countable nouns.

× It helps to relax and provide a very rejuvenating environment.

✓ They help me relax and provide a very rejuvenating environment.

Subject-verb agreement and unclear subject: 'It' is unclear; the intended subject is 'hilly areas' or 'green trees' (plural), so use 'They help me relax' and 'provide'. Advice: match subject number with verbs and specify the subject when necessary.