Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar mistakes, avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to add one specific reason or example. For instance, say you use your phone for a particular purpose (reading news, replying to messages) and briefly contrast that with occasional times you look outside.

Exemplo: Honestly, I usually look at my phone when I commute because I use social media to catch up on news and messages. However, sometimes I glance at the scenery when something interesting, like unusual architecture or a park, passes by.

Sugestão: Give a clear, direct response first, then add a specific example with correct grammar and cohesive linking. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. "particularly beautiful views") and correct article use and word order.

Exemplo: I only take photos of scenery when it looks particularly beautiful or unusual. For example, when I visited Japan I took many photos of the countryside because it was a new landscape for me and I wanted to remember the experience.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct preference statement, then give two clear, specific reasons using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid vague expressions like "blight blaze" and replace with accurate descriptions (e.g. "bright sunlight, gentle waves"). Keep answers to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "so".

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel peaceful and refreshed. The sound of the waves and the bright sunlight by the shore help me relax after a busy week.

× To be very honest, I'm very tech savvy and most of the time I use my mobile phone to check out different social media platform during I commute so I don't really look at the scenery outside the car and bus.

✓ To be very honest, I'm very tech-savvy and most of the time I use my mobile phone to check out different social media platforms while I commute, so I don't really look at the scenery outside the car or bus.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'during I commute' should be 'while I commute' (use 'while' for actions happening at the same time). Also 'platform' should be plural 'platforms' (plural noun for multiple sites). Use 'car or bus' instead of 'car and bus' to indicate either vehicle. Hyphenate 'tech-savvy'. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'while' for simultaneous actions, match singular/plural nouns, and choose correct conjunctions for clarity.

× It really depends if there are any especially beautiful scenery outside the car window.

✓ It really depends if there is any especially beautiful scenery outside the car window.

Problem: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is', not 'are'. Use 'any' with uncountable nouns is acceptable. Suggestion: treat 'scenery' as uncountable and use singular verb agreement: 'there is any scenery'. Alternatively say 'any especially beautiful views' to use plural 'are'.

× For example, when I travel to Japan, this is something somewhere new for me and I don't usually have the chance to visit.

✓ For example, when I traveled to Japan, it was somewhere new for me and I didn't usually have the chance to visit.

Problems: tense mismatch — the speaker refers to a past trip so past tense 'traveled/was/didn't' is appropriate. 'This is something somewhere new' is awkward; use 'it was somewhere new'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when describing past experiences.

× I do take photos to capture the the beautiful moment.

✓ I do take photos to capture the beautiful moments.

Problems: double 'the the' is a typo. 'Moment' is too specific; use plural 'moments' to match general photographing. Also article 'the' is optional; if specific moment, 'the beautiful moment' is okay but here general 'beautiful moments' is better. Suggestion: remove duplication and choose singular/plural appropriately.

× I like both the sea and the mountains, but if I have to choose I would say I prefer the sea more because looking at the sea bringing me a peaceful mind and very refreshing.

✓ I like both the sea and the mountains, but if I have to choose I would say I prefer the sea because looking at the sea brings me peace and is very refreshing.

Problems: verb form 'bringing' is incorrect; use 'brings' for third-person singular present. 'A peaceful mind' is awkward; use 'peace' or 'a peaceful mind' adjusted to 'brings me peace'. 'Prefer the sea more' is redundant; 'prefer the sea' is sufficient. Suggestion: use third-person singular '-s' for verbs and choose concise natural nouns ('peace').

× It also comes with a blight blaze which is very comfortable.

✓ It also comes with a bright blaze which is very pleasant.

Problems: 'blight' is incorrect word; should be 'bright'. 'Blaze' is odd for sea; consider 'bright breeze' or 'warm breeze' if meaning wind. 'Comfortable' describes objects, 'pleasant' fits experiences. Suggestion: choose correct adjectives and collocations ('bright' not 'blight', 'breeze' if wind, and use 'pleasant' for feelings).