Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler phrases (e.g., "you know"). Also correct minor grammar (e.g., "I like to look out of the window" or "I like to look at the scenery").

Exemplo: I usually look out of the window when I travel. For example, I enjoy observing new neighborhoods and countryside views, especially places I haven’t visited before, because it helps me notice local culture and landscapes.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer, then give one focused example and a reason. Reduce hesitations and correct awkward phrasing (e.g., "I sometimes film" not "I film like taking videos"). Use linking words like "for example" or "because" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos and sometimes short videos of scenery. For example, when I pass through mountain areas with forests I photograph the ridges and trees because I’m a nature lover and want to remember those views.

Sugestão: Give a direct, concise preference sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid repeating the preference sentence twice.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the green scenery and fresh air. For instance, I like photographing mountain ridges and forests, which feels more relaxing to me than visiting the seaside.

× Yes, I do like to look at the windows and scenery when traveling because I'm the type of person who is really appreciating things like what I see around me because especially when I don't have the experience before, like riding with that in in that area.

✓ Yes, I like to look at the windows and scenery when traveling because I'm the type of person who really appreciates things I see around me, especially when I have not experienced riding in that area before.

Error: incorrect use of continuous form 'is really appreciating' and awkward phrasing. Type: Verb + -ing form and sentence structure. Reason: 'appreciate' is a stative verb describing a general preference, so simple present 'appreciates' is correct. Also 'do like' is unnecessary emphatic; use 'like'. 'I don't have the experience before' is ungrammatical; use 'have not experienced ... before' or 'have not ridden there before'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and stative verbs, simplify redundant words, and reorder for clarity.

× So I really like to, you know, to see and appreciate things around me.

✓ So I really like to see and appreciate the things around me.

Error: unnecessary infinitive duplication and filler 'you know'. Type: Verb + -ing form / sentence structure. Reason: 'to, you know, to see' repeats 'to' and includes filler; use plain infinitive 'to see' or simple form 'see'. Suggestion: remove fillers and duplicate 'to' for a clear sentence.

× Yes, I do love taking pictures or sometimes I film like taking videos of those around me, especially the sceneries they click.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures, and sometimes I film videos of the scenery around me.

Error: awkward use of 'do love' and incorrect noun usage 'sceneries they click'. Type: Verb + -ing form and incorrect use of nouns. Reason: 'do love' is emphatic but unnecessary; 'film like taking videos' is ungrammatical—use 'film videos' or 'take videos'. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun; 'sceneries' and 'they click' are incorrect. Suggestion: use 'scenery' and simplify verbs to 'love taking' and 'film videos'.

× The landscape that I am, I haven't visited before, especially the the mountains and the trees.

✓ The landscapes I have not visited before, especially the mountains and the forests.

Error: incorrect pronoun and fragment 'that I am' and repeated 'the the'. Type: Incorrect use of pronouns / sentence structure. Reason: 'that I am' is a meaningless clause here; use a clear relative clause 'that I have not visited before' or simplify to 'I have not visited before'. Also 'trees' is fine but 'forests' is more natural with 'mountains'. Suggestion: remove extraneous words and fix repetition.

× You know I am a nature person.

✓ You know, I am a nature person.

Error: punctuation/intonation issue rather than tense; however sentence is acceptable. Type: Present tense issue (minor). Reason: Add comma after 'You know' to reflect spoken pause. Suggestion: include comma for clarity; otherwise sentence is grammatically correct.

× I prefer to be on the mountains because I love greens and I love to take pictures with the mountain ridges, the trees around me, and I love the air because it's very fresh when I am in the mountains.

✓ I prefer being in the mountains because I love greenery, and I enjoy taking pictures of the mountain ridges and the trees around me. I also love the air because it is very fresh when I am in the mountains.

Error: awkward use of 'to be on the mountains', 'greens', and long run-on sentence. Type: Verb in the present participle form and incorrect use of nouns. Reason: Use 'prefer being' or 'prefer to be in' and 'in the mountains' instead of 'on'. 'Greens' is unnatural; use 'greenery'. Break into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: choose 'in the mountains', use 'greenery', and split into shorter sentences.

× So I prefer to be in the mountains rather than the sea.

✓ So I prefer the mountains to the sea.

Error: preposition and phrasing slightly awkward. Type: Incorrect use of prepositions. Reason: Native phrasing is 'prefer A to B' or 'prefer A rather than B' with parallel structures; 'be in the mountains rather than the sea' is less natural. Suggestion: use 'prefer the mountains to the sea' or 'prefer being in the mountains to being at the sea'.