Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid idioms that sound awkward (e.g., "not my cup of tea all over"). Also keep length to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I usually don't look out the window. Instead, I scroll through social media or take a short nap to relax after a busy day. For example, on my commute I often catch up on messages or listen to music to feel refreshed.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence and give a clear reason with a linking word. Avoid absolute negative language like "uninteresting" without explanation. Use one concrete example to support your reason.

Exemplo: No, I usually don't take photos from a moving car because the pictures often come out blurry. Therefore, I prefer to rest or look at my phone instead, for instance I often close my eyes for 15–20 minutes on long drives to recharge.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid vague or unclear statements (e.g., "climb mountains in 2 kilometers"). Use precise language about activities and health to explain preference.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea. First, my fitness is limited, so beach activities like walking on the sand or playing football are easier than long mountain hikes. Second, the seaside is more social, so I can relax and spend time with friends without strenuous effort.

× No, I don't even do that because looking out the window is not my cup of tea all over.

✓ No, I don't do that because looking out the window is not my cup of tea.

The adverbial phrase 'all over' is awkward and unnecessary here. Remove it and place adverbs close to the verb they modify. 'Even' is also unnecessary; if kept it should be 'I don't even do that' but sounds informal. Suggestion: omit 'even' and 'all over' for clarity and naturalness.

× When travelling by bus I usually scroll social media or just take a nap to have a better mood after a busy day.

✓ When travelling by bus, I usually scroll through social media or take a nap to improve my mood after a busy day.

Use 'scroll through social media' (correct preposition) and 'improve my mood' is more natural than 'have a better mood.' Include a comma after the introductory clause. Also avoid unnecessary 'just' to be concise.

× No I don't when traveling by car I just take a nap to have a better mood after busy days.

✓ No, I don't. When traveling by car, I just take a nap to improve my mood after busy days.

Sentence run-on needs punctuation separation into two sentences. Add comma after introductory clause and article adjustments: 'after busy days' is acceptable but 'improve my mood' is more natural. Also add a comma after 'No' for spoken style.

× And taking photo of scenery is uninteresting.

✓ And taking photos of the scenery is uninteresting.

Use plural 'photos' not 'photo' and include the definite article 'the' before 'scenery' to refer to the specific view outside the window. Also beginning 'And' is informal but acceptable in speech.

× I would like to choose the sea because my physical health is not really good, so I can climb mountains in 2 kilometers and at the sea we can play football or just chilling with friends.

✓ I would choose the sea because my physical health is not very good, so I cannot climb mountains for long distances; at the seaside we can play football or just chill with friends.

Multiple issues: 'would like to choose' is wordy—'would choose' or 'I'd choose' is better. 'Not really good' -> 'not very good.' 'I can climb mountains in 2 kilometers' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely means 'I cannot climb mountains for long distances' so corrected to convey inability. 'At the sea' -> 'at the seaside' or 'by the sea.' Use base verb 'chill' after 'just' rather than gerund 'chilling' to match parallel structure. Use semicolon or conjunction to join clauses properly.