Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g. “as a university student” and avoid saying “one hour an hour”).

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus. As a university student I commute between two campuses, and the journey usually takes about an hour, so I enjoy watching the passing neighborhoods and fields to relax.

Sugestão: Provide a clear direct answer then give specific details and use linking words to make it fluent. Remove filler words like “you know” and avoid repeating words. Mention frequency and reasons to add content depth.

Exemplo: Sometimes I do, especially in spring. For example, when roadside flowers are in bloom I like to photograph them because their colors look beautiful against the landscape.

Sugestão: Answer directly and then give two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Eliminate repetitions and correct tense/word order (e.g. “I grew up in a seaside town”). Mention a concrete example to strengthen the response.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea. I grew up in a seaside town, so I find the sea calming, and when I feel sad I often walk along the beach to clear my mind.

× Oh yes, I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car as a student in university, I always travel by bus from one school area to another, so on the way there the way usually takes me about one hour an hour and I.

✓ Oh yes, I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car. As a university student, I always travel by bus from one part of campus to another, and the journey usually takes me about an hour.

This original response is a run-on sentence with repetition and unclear phrasing ('the way there the way' and 'about one hour an hour and I'). It needs to be split into clear sentences and redundant words removed. Use 'As a university student' (correct noun order) and 'the journey usually takes me about an hour' for clarity. Suggested improvement: break long answers into shorter sentences, avoid repetition, and check for redundant phrases.

× Yeah, sometimes, and especially in spring, in springtime, the, you know, the flowers beside the road are blossoming. And I'm, I love to take pictures of them.

✓ Yeah, sometimes, especially in spring, the flowers beside the road blossom, and I love taking pictures of them.

'Are blossoming' is grammatically acceptable, but repetitive filler ('in spring, in springtime, the, you know, the') makes the sentence clumsy. Changing to the simple present 'blossom' states a general habit. Use 'love taking pictures' (verb + -ing) instead of 'love to take pictures' is also correct; either is acceptable but '-ing' flows better here. Remove filler words for clarity. Suggested improvement: remove fillers, choose a consistent tense for habitual actions, and prefer concise phrasing.

× Oh I maybe I prefer the sea. As a kid growing up in the seaside seaside town I I just live by the seaside and I always enjoy the seaside scenery. Once I was sad or depressed I would go by the seaside.

✓ I think I prefer the sea. As a kid growing up in a seaside town, I lived by the sea and always enjoyed the seaside scenery. When I felt sad or depressed, I would go to the seaside.

Multiple tense and repetition problems: 'maybe I prefer' is awkward — 'I think I prefer' is clearer. 'I I just live' mixes present with past; since 'as a kid growing up' is past, use past simple 'I lived'. 'Seaside seaside town' is a repeated word. 'Once I was sad or depressed' is better as 'When I felt sad or depressed' to indicate habitual past action; use 'go to the seaside' (correct preposition) rather than 'go by the seaside.' Suggested improvement: keep tense consistent (past for childhood), remove repeated words, and use correct prepositions ('to' for going to a place).