Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use one or two supporting details with correct verb forms. Include linking words for coherence. For example, replace repeated negatives with a single clear statement and a specific reason.

Exemplo: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in the Old Town of Vladikavkaz, where the main avenue is lined with low-rise historic buildings, so most structures are only two or three storeys high.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and correct tense and word choice. Begin with a direct answer, then give one clear, specific example using past simple and linking words (e.g., “for example,” “because”). Avoid filler words and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings. For example, when I visited Lyon I took many photos because the facades were richly decorated and very beautiful.

Sugestão: Be specific and avoid vague words or mispronounced names. Give one or two clear examples and a reason. Use linking words like “for example” and “because.” Correct proper nouns (e.g., Louvre, Château) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes. For example, I would love to visit the Louvre in Paris because it houses so many famous artworks and the building itself is architecturally impressive. I am also interested in visiting the Château de Versailles because of its grand interiors.

Sugestão: Give a clear, direct opinion first, then support it with a specific reason. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I wouldn't mind living in a tall building' or 'I don't mind living in a tall building') and avoid hesitation. Use linking words like “because” to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I wouldn't mind living in a tall building because I enjoy having a beautiful view from a high floor. However, I might prefer a lower floor if I valued easier access to the street.

× there aren't any tall buildings nearby and I would say there isn't any really tall buildings in my hometown.

✓ there aren't any tall buildings nearby and I would say there aren't really any tall buildings in my hometown.

The original mixes plural 'buildings' with singular 'isn't any', causing number mismatch. Use 'aren't' with the plural noun and place 'any' before 'tall buildings' or use 'really any' for emphasis. Suggestion: match verb number to noun and keep word order: 'there aren't really any tall buildings'.

× Sometimes it's, I remember I've been visited Umm, Lyon and I did a lot of photos of the buildings there.

✓ Sometimes I remember visiting Lyon, and I took a lot of photos of the buildings there.

The sentence uses an incorrect verb pattern 'I've been visited' and mixes tenses. 'Remember' with a past experience is followed by the gerund 'visiting'. Use simple past 'took' for completed action 'photos'. Also remove filler 'it's' and unnecessary 'been'.

× And so I've been umm, I've been, I took a lot of photo there.

✓ And so I took a lot of photos there.

Redundant 'I've been' and incorrect singular 'photo'. Use simple past 'took' to describe a completed action and plural 'photos'. Avoid unnecessary present perfect continuous when simple past is intended.

× I'd like to visit, uh, Paris and it has a lot of beautiful buildings, but the Louvre museum and shampoo, umm, castle, it's probably one of the most favorite and, and, uh, the buildings which I really, really want to visit.

✓ I'd like to visit Paris; it has many beautiful buildings, and the Louvre Museum and Château de Chambord, for example, are among the places I most want to visit.

The original misuses articles and has unclear words ('shampoo' likely wrong). 'Louvre Museum' is a proper name and 'Château de Chambord' needs correct name and capitalization. Use plural agreement 'are among the places I most want to visit' rather than 'it's probably one of the most favorite'. Also avoid redundant fillers.

× I don't know but I don't mind to live in a tall buildings.

✓ I don't know, but I don't mind living in a tall building.

After 'don't mind' use the gerund 'living', not 'to live'. Also correct singular/plural: match 'a tall building' or 'tall buildings' (with no 'a'). The corrected version uses singular to match 'a'.

× I like to when it has a beautiful view, especially in the high umm in a high floor.

✓ I would like it when it has a beautiful view, especially on a high floor.

Use 'on a high floor' rather than 'in a high floor'. Also 'I like to when' is ungrammatical; 'I would like it when' or 'I like it when' is correct. Use article 'a high floor'.

× And they have umm, a lot of decoration outside.

✓ And they have a lot of decorations outside.

Prefer plural 'decorations' to describe many decorative elements. 'They have' is correct for third person plural, but the noun should agree in number. Alternatively 'a lot of decoration' can be used to mean general ornamentation, but plural is clearer here.