Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid filler words, repairs and repetition. Use correct nouns and articles (e.g., "a 40-storey building").

Exemplo: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a 40-storey apartment block only five minutes away, and several newer residential towers have been built in the last few years.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons with specific examples. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases (e.g., "white tall airline buildings" is unclear). Use linking words such as "because" or "for example".

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because I like architectural details. For example, I often photograph a nearby development called Vega Land, which has white facades and abundant greenery that create interesting contrasts.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence stating you would like to visit, then add specific reasons and one concrete detail. Avoid trailing off and incomplete phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a building called Vega Land in Ernakulam because it looks very scenic from the outside. For instance, it has wide facades covered in different varieties of plants, which I think would be pleasant to see up close.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly and provide two specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "however." Avoid hesitations and vague references (e.g., "Gen."). Keep to under five sentences.

Exemplo: I would prefer to live in a small house because I grew up in one and feel more comfortable there. However, many people choose apartments today because they offer better security and modern facilities.

× And there are lots of tall buildings near my home.

✓ There are lots of tall buildings near my home.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary here. Remove the conjunction to produce a clear declarative sentence. Use a simple subject-verb structure: 'There are ...' to state existence.

× If you see, we can view a variety of tall buildings.

✓ If you come here, you can see a variety of tall buildings.

The original uses 'If you see' incorrectly. A conditional should specify the condition clearly (for example 'If you come here'). Also 'view' is formal; 'see' or 'look at' fits spoken register. Ensure the conditional clause relates properly to the result clause.

× Up to 40 Storey building near my home.

✓ There is a building of up to 40 storeys near my home.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and article. Add 'There is' and use 'a building of up to 40 storeys' for correct noun phrase and plural form 'storeys' after a number.

× So it's common nowadays to have tall buildings everywhere.

✓ So it is common nowadays to have tall buildings everywhere.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in speech but expanded form 'it is' is clearer in corrected text; no grammatical error beyond style. This suggestion keeps meaning and improves formality.

× Uh, like flats compartments. Sorry apart.

✓ Uh, like flats or apartments. Sorry, I meant apartments.

'Flats compartments' is incorrect collocation. Use either 'flats' (British) or 'apartments' (American). Add 'or' to show alternatives and clarify with 'I meant' to correct a slip.

× I really love to take photos of buildings, uh, like uh, white tall airline buildings, which is popular in our, in our country nowadays.

✓ I really love taking photos of buildings, such as tall white high-rise buildings, which are popular in our country nowadays.

Use gerund 'taking' after 'love'. 'Airline buildings' is wrong collocation; 'high-rise' describes tall buildings. Change 'which is' to 'which are' to agree with plural 'buildings'. Remove repeated 'in our'.

× Apart from that, uh, there is a flat named Vega land which is built constricted near to my home.

✓ Apart from that, there is a flat called Vega Land that was recently constructed near my home.

'Named' is okay but 'called' is more natural. 'Built constricted' is incorrect; use 'constructed' and include tense 'was constructed' or 'was recently constructed'. Use 'near my home' (no 'to' after 'near').

× Uh, it's full of plants.

✓ It is full of plants.

Contraction expansion for formality; grammatically sentence is correct. Suggest using 'It is' in corrected text.

× There is a building at Ernakulam, I have recently noticed the name called Vega Land which is very beautiful and scenic from outside itself and it has got a wide tall walls with lots of greenery like filled with different varieties of.

✓ There is a building in Ernakulam called Vega Land, which I have recently noticed. It is very beautiful and scenic from the outside and has wide tall walls with lots of greenery, filled with different varieties of plants.

Original contains comma splices and awkward phrasing. Use 'in Ernakulam' (preposition), 'called Vega Land' (reduced relative clause), separate sentences to avoid run-on. Use 'from the outside' and 'has wide tall walls' (no 'got' in formal writing). Complete the final noun 'plants'.

× I prefer to live in a small house rather than a tall building because, uh, I, for my childhood, I used to live in a house, so I'm used to it.

✓ I prefer to live in a small house rather than a tall building because during my childhood I lived in a house, so I am used to it.

Fix tense and word order: 'for my childhood' should be 'during my childhood'. Use simple past 'lived' for past habit and 'I am used to it' for current state. Remove extra commas and filler words.

× But nowadays all the Gen. all the people prefer to take an apartment or a plant for the security reasons.

✓ But nowadays most people prefer to live in an apartment for security reasons.

'Gen.' is unclear; likely 'people' is intended. 'Take an apartment' is awkward; use 'live in an apartment'. 'Plant' is incorrect. Use 'most people' or 'all people' depending on meaning; 'most' is safer. Remove 'the' before 'security reasons'.

× And so as, uh, the, the.

✓ (Omit this filler fragment or complete the sentence if more information is intended.)

This is an incomplete fragment and only contains fillers. Advise omitting such fragments or completing the thought with a full clause; spoken hesitations are natural but should be removed in written corrections.